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Book review on Wingless

Review 3#:

Title: Wingless

Author: @Bulldog2003

Genre: Fantasy

Rating: G

Parts: 19 (ongoing)

Summary: Nessie has been through a lot. She has been forced to swallow more than she can. When she doesn't think it can get worse, her long-lost mother appears and sweeps her-along with her two best friends-on an eye-opening adventure.

Things to work on:

Here's everybody's least favorite part, right? Unfortunately, if I did not have this section, I would be unable to call this an "honest" book of reviews and advice! So here are the things which @Bulldog2003 might want to work on: 1.) your grammar is great, however, you tend to start many sentences off with a lowercase letter. Just remember to capitalize it. 2.) At the beginning, you tended to switch between past and current point of view. Which is very easy to slip into! I do that all the time! But it is something you can fix with a little bit of work. 3.) Certain scenes might need a little assistance to make them more understandable. I think I left some suggestions in the comments section. 4.) Some reactions were a little overly-dramatic, but with a little coaching, they'll be fine!

Things I enjoyed:

Now here's the fun part! The author had short chapters which helped the book fly by! It was very easy to read! The ideas were original and intriguing. Fans of the Percy Jackson and Harry Potter books will find this an interesting book! @Bulldog2003 ended each chapter with a hook that created wonder. She also had some really great descriptions thrown in there as well. There are good strong characters with good personalities. Overall, the story is worth a read. Go check it out!

NOTE: This book was not finished. Normally I would not review an unfinished book. Please do not ask me to read your uncompleted story!!! I understand that it is hard to complete a story here on Wattpad, but if you want to best review of your story, please finish your story before submitting it for review!!!

ADDITIONAL NOTE: Yes, ANOTHER additional note! If you have a completed story/book which you want me to check out, just comment below. Also, if you asked me to review your FINISHED book and I still haven't done so for no apparent reason, please comment below!!! If you are just now interested in having me read your story, please go back to chapter one called: "Introduction" to see if you are eligible for a read. Thanks for understanding,

Your faithful writer, Lewis