Is Your Warriors OC A Mary-Sue?

Olivepaw

This OC was submitted by Kawaii_Song_Princess.

Name: Olivepaw

Cute! X3 I can't remember the last time I saw an OC with the name Olive.

Nickname: None (She dislikes nicknames)

Okay.

Clan/Rank: Apprentice of Shadowclan

I see only a few Shadowclan OC's whenever I go looking at Warriors OC's, and I myself have only one if you discount my soon-to-be-released Undertale AU called UnderClan. But I see even less of ShadowClan apprentices.

Gender: Female

Olive tends to be a bit of a she-cat stereotyped name, but then again, I don't see too many Olive OC's.

Looks: Grey fur with brown ears and tail, olive green eyes, a four scars on her muzzle

Ooh, I don't often hear of evident scars on apprentices, so I applaud you on that! On top of that, I love her appearance!

Mate: None, since she's too young. She used to have a crush before said crush died in a border dispute

This is what happened to my OC, Mousestar, who I am working on a Super Edition for, only she was a young warrior when her crush was killed, but I don't ever see this sort of thing for apprentices, or having happened during apprenticeship.

Sexuality: Heterosexual

I can't really give this anything negative, at least she's not a third demisexual submission in a row -.-

Age: 10 moons

For an apprentice, I can't really take anything off for age, unless they are younger than six moons of course.

Parents: Finchwing(mother, deceased) and Russetmask (Father)

The first thing I thought of when I saw Olivepaw's mother's name was Finchwing, who is an amazing artist on YouTube. But I think that these are great names, especially for ShadowClan cats.

Siblings: Marshwing (Older brother), Rosekit and Poppykit (Sisters, deceased)

I see quite a few OC's with deceased siblings, especially sisters, but I like how she has a much older brother to look after her.

Backstory: When she was 5 moons old, her mother went missing. A moon went by and she became the apprentice of a she-cat named Ashtail. While she went out hunting with Ashtail and her brother Marshwing, she found her mother dying due to a sickness. Finchwing revealed she had run away due to the guilt of the deaths of Rosekit and Poppykit right before dying. She develops a crush on another apprentice named Honeypaw a moon later, who liked her back but denied it(Tsun Tsun Honeypaw~). 2 moons passed and Olivepaw and Honeypaw grew closer, but one day a patrol that included Olivepaw and Honeypaw got into a fight with Thunderclan. A TC apprentice attempted to attack Olivepaw, but Honeypaw intercepted, leading to his accidental death. For the next moon, Olivepaw only spoke to Ashtail and Marshwing, due to her close bond with both warriors. Only recently has she realized Honeypaw would've wanted her to move on.

It wasn't too detailed, but I like that, it was easy to read and easier to understand. Now, I love how Finchwing didn't stay in the Clan and sulk about or go insane like Millie after Briarlight's accident, but instead ran off to hide from the guilt after her kits died, even though it didn't seem to be her fault. Unless it was and it just wasn't found out by Olivepaw, but still, I like that about Olivepaw's backstory. And Honeypaw saving her at the risk of his life was amazing, but a bit too overused that I see.

Likes: Hunting, Exploring, The Gathering

A lot of cats like these things, but in a world where things to really like are limited, I can't really take anything away.

Dislikes: Border disputes, being alone

Border disputes are probably a no-brainer, but I like how you added it in anyway.

Strengths: Hunting, Stealth

Yup, she's definitely ShadowClan, I can't take anything off for this, because I believe that a Clan cat should be skilled in what their Clan is skilled in, and maybe an extra talent, to make them unique.

Weaknesses: Witnessing death, fighting alone, being left alone, orphaned kits or a kitless queen

I think that witnessing death should be counted as a dislike, not really a weakness.

Extra: Due to witnessing the deaths of both her mother and crush, Olivepaw has developed thanatophobia (fear of ones own death) and monophobia (fear of being alone)

I love how you actually put the term of her fears, I love learning about what different terms there are for different things,so I personally love that!

Okay, so I give Olivepaw
99% Original
1% changeable

This OC is amazing, and I would honestly love to see a story about her sometime, if possible!