Is Your Warriors OC A Mary-Sue?

Oceanstar

This OC was resubmitted by ThatCannibalDocter.

Name: Oceanstar/Oceanfur

Nickname: Sandy

Um, this is a better nickname for her, it makes more sense than MeMeep, that's for sure.

Clan/Rank: Leader of SnowClan

Apprentice(s): Acornleaf, Mousefur

Gender: She-cat

Looks: Tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes and fluffy fur.

Mate/Kit(s): Turtletail/None

Sexuality: Homosexual

Age: 27 moons

This is better, but still a little young for a leader according to my calculations. (My calculations for how old a leader should be ehen they become leader under normal circumstances are on Deathstar's part, I believe.)

Parents: Mapleleaf and Aeonfur.

Siblings: Lionlight (Elder), Dawnsong, Singpaw, Juniperpaw.

Bio/Backstory: She was born shortly born after the battle of shadowclan and snowclan over territory. Her and her littler mates dawnkit and lionkit were raised by mossfur(queen with kits) while her mother sandfur was hunting for the clan cause if the lack of warriors they had left form the battle. The kits were made apprentice a moon early and had trouble hunting and training. When they were hunting on time lionpaw jumped on a almost broken branch and fell breaking both his legs and which made him stuck in the medicine den for moons until he was made a elder and lives in the elders den. Her sister and her worked harder and harder as moons went by and were made warriors three moons after dawnsong had kits who which were the father of tigerblaze. The kits were leafkit and marskit. Which left her the only littler mate as a warrior. moons passed by and she had her first apprentice and her mother maple leaf had a other littler which two died after a few moments and only two survived which were named singpaw and juniperpaw. The leader died of sickness and the deputy took place and made oceanfur the new deputy. Her first appertince acornpaw earn his warrior name acornleaf and lead to her second appernticnce mousefur and meeting her mate

The backstory is a lot better, but I'm confused as to why there is mention of a cat named Sandfur who is said to be her mother, and the cat named Mapleleaf who you said before was her actual mother was only mentioned at the end.

Relation to any main characters?: None

Likes: Catmint, Clans gettibg along, happy things

Dislikes: Clans and clanmates fighting and getting angry

Strengths: sense of smell and hearing

Weaknesses: She's slow, can't run bery fast.

Extras: N/A

Oceanstar has definitely improved, KateleneSmolBean.

I give this OC:
85% Original
15% Changeable