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Eaglestar

This OC was submitted by OrcaPlayer.

Name: Eaglestar (Eagleclaw/Eaglepaw/Eaglekit)

Nickname: None

Clan/Rank: SnowClan, MoonClan (version of StarClan). He was the leader of SnowClan.

Apprentice(s): Viperfang, Nettlestripe, Birchstar (Explained in bio), Lindenpaw

Uh, Lindenpaw? Was LINDENpaw a typo or former Kittypet, rogue, or loner?

Gender: Tom-cat

Looks: A dark brown tabby, with a white mask and a tip of his tail, a faint scar on his right knee, and strict yellow eyes.

I couldn't find a picture for him, sorry. I looked for half an hour and I came up with nothing that matched his description.

Personality: When Eaglestar was only a kit, he was very hyper and bubbly. After the death of his two sisters, he became more distant. He was very patient and (most of the time) calm cat, a wise cat, he has lived a long life. On the other paw, he was strict and when someone occasionally angered him, he acted aggressively.

Mate/Crush/Kit(s): None/Snowspot/Birchstar (explained in bio)

Sexuality: Straight

Age: 72 moons (at death)

Parents: Hareleap (father) and Blackbird (mother).

Siblings: OwlFeather, Schistfur, Turtlepaw, Lilackit

I honestly don't know what is with the odd names... so far I've seen Cayonleap, Lindenpaw, and now Schistfur? I am thoroughly confused...

Bio/Backstory: Eaglekit was born to Blackbird, a dark gray queen and Hareleap, a pale brown tom with short tail, with his siblings Owlkit, Schistkit, Turtlekit and Lilackit. Out of all the kits, he was the first-born and strongest. He was very hyper, and often played with his siblings a bit roughly. On the other paw, Lilackit, a pale brown she-cat was the smallest of all the kits, and died of some unknown ilness when she was two moons old. It destroyed their parents, and soon after Blackbird fell into a river and got swept away. The four remaining kits, now three moons old, were given to a queen called Yellowstep who had kits on her own. When they all became apprentices, Turtlepaw was killed by a fox, which ruined Eaglepaw even more. He became a warrior at age of fourteen moons, at the same time as Schistpaw. Owlpaw became a medicine cat apprentice instead. Eaglepaw, now named Eagleclaw, became quickly a great warrior, but compared to his brother a weak hunter. He later fought off a wolverine, it gave him the scar on his hind leg. When he recovered from his wound, he got his first apprentice, Viperpaw. Viperpaw successfully became a warrior, Viperfang. In the meantime, Owlpaw gained his medicine cat name. Some time later Eagleclaw trained another apprentice, Nettlepaw. Then, Stormcloud, the deputy, got accidentally killed in a border fight. Crimsonstar made Eagleclaw his deputy, and at the same time Hareleap joined the elders. Once on a patrol with Schistfur and Nettlepaw, Eagleclaw spotted a strange white cat with silver speckles in their territory. While Nettlepaw ran to the camp for more warriors, they tried to chase her off, but the cat almost killed Schistfur. She later revealed that her name is Snowspot and ran away because more warriors were coming. Eagleclaw couldnt get her off her mind, and neglected the training of Nettlepaw. Soon, he saw Snowspot again. He and Snowspot fell in love, but Eagleclaw stopped in time and rejected having kits with her. Enraged, but humble Snowspot left. When he came back, it was revealed that there was a fight in the clan. Many cats fell victims, the medicine cat, one apprentice and Crimsonstar lost her eigth life. Owlfeather became the medicine cat, Nettlepaw a warrior. A year later, during Leaf-Bare Crimsonstar lost his final life by a greencough. Eagleclaw came to the Moontree, gained his nine lifes and became Eaglestar. A white she-cat called Whiteflower fell in love with Eaglestar, but he didn't. Then, he met Snowspot again. She came to him with a white kit, called Birch, and she wanted him to raise her in Snowclan. He agreed, and persuaded Whiteflower to pretend that she is the mother of Birchkit. Birchkit became Birchpaw, and Eaglestar apprenticed her, because he wasn't her real father, but the cats didn't know that. Birchpaw became Birchstep. OwlFeather died and his aprrentice Minttail took his place. Birchstep got an apprentice of her own, and when the deputy Lightningstorm retired Eaglestar made her deputy. He was getting old, and got his final apprentice Lindenpaw. The training didn't go well, because he was losing hearing. He died a couple moons later, killed by a wolf loner, protecting his clan mates.

Interesting backstory. I like it, and I love all the names and detail you put into it.

Relation to any main characters?: None

Likes: Lizards, warm days, cleanness, sharpening his claws

Dislikes: Turtles, fish, snow, really young kits, getting wet

Strengths: He was a massive strong tom, he could climb trees very well

Weaknesses: He can't swim, he isn't that fast and because of short legs he can't jump very well. Near the end of his life he becomes half-deaf.

Extras: He was named Eaglekit after his grandfather, Eaglestripe.

He hates turtles because they remind him of his deceased sister Turtlepaw.

He can't swim because even though there is a river running through Snowclan territory, it's so cold that swimming in it could be dangerous.

Interesting facts, I like this character a lot!

So, I give this OC:
98% Original
2% Changeable

This OC was very detailed and I like that!