Is Your Warriors OC A Mary-Sue?

Nightcatcher

This OC was submitted by Milk_the_duck.

Name: Nightcatcher/Sparrowkit

Nickname: Night

Clan/Rank: Warrior of GloryClan (dead)/CattailClan (Living)

Apprentice(s): None

Gender: She-cat (Formerly Tom)

Looks: With a pelt smooth as water, the smoothness disrupted by scars from past battles. Her eyes show an intense spark of wisdom, but the wisdom tends to be cold and sharp with the cloudy gray. Her tail is very smooth and long, but not too long to disrupt her ability to run. Long legs smoothed down with black, only one shines brighter than a star, her right fore-paw strikes out with a blinding white. Simple splotches of white trace down her neck and back. Her fangs tend to be small but her claws are blunt and sharp.

At first it's hard to really get a good imagen but reading her description a second time put her image in my head. Very descriptive, but, blunt and sharp are antonyms... Blunt means dull and sharp means, well, sharp.

Personality: N/A

I'll let this slid being that I just recently added that to the list of requirements earlier today.

Mate/Crush/Kit(s): None/N/A/None

Sexuality: She doesn't know/Asexual

As an Asexual myself, Asexuality is not what someone is until they find out what they are, Asexuality is the lack of interest in finding a mate. So Nightcatcher would more likely be Heterosexual to her emotional gender/Homosexual to her physical gender, or in other words, she most likely likes Tom-cats, as you said that she is jealous, and even dislikes queens and their kits because she knows that she can never have any truly her own.

Age: 14 moons

Parents: Honeyfang (Mother), Bearfang (Father)

Siblings: Jayfire (Brother), Briarmask (Brother)

Bio/Backstory: Born as a tom, Sparrowkit was close to being the runt of the litter, but, thankfully, Jaykit was the unlucky runt. (We're still talking about the same cat, don't worry) Briarkit, Sparrowkit, and Jaykit were fair to eachother, they never went too far when they teased eachother, their squabbles were never serious (they were mainly for fun really), none of the kits left anyone kit out of the games they played, and such. But Sparrowkit didn't feel as though he "belonged" in the "tom section", while yes, he loved his brothers to death, he just didn't feel "like a tom". When someone used he or him pronouns, he felt so hurt. He often felt trapped inside the wrong place everywhere, especially when people talked about him. He would rather be gossiping with Blossompaw than rough housing with his littermates. Sparrowkit soon realized that GloryClan had made a mistake with his gender, trapping her soul inside the wrong body. Sparrowkit knew she couldn't keep her secret to her death, so she told her mother. Honeyfang went through a stage of shock, scolding Sparrowkit for even saying that she was a she-cat. In the end, though, Honeyfang got over it and allowed Sparrowkit to share the news with her littermates and father. Her littermates didn't get it much, but accepted that Sparrowkit was a she. Her father grew cold and distant, favoring her less and less to the point where Bearleap loathed being Sparrowkit's father. Sparrowkit had her courage to tell the whole Clan damaged by this, but in the end, the support from her mother and littermates had overcome this. When she was 5 moons old, she told the leader, the leader then told the whole of CattailClan during a Clan meeting. Most of the Clan took it well but there were some against this, often trying to convince Sparrowkit that she was a tom. Finally, Sparrowkit and her littermates had their apprentice ceremony and Sparrowkit asked for a name change because her name had reminded that she was supposed to be a tom. Her name was changed to Nightpaw for her pelt color. When she was first introduced to the other Clans (GrooveClan, BirchClan, and MapleClan), Elkstar says that Nightpaw was a she-cat loner that had strayed into CattailClan and since she was interested in joining, she was made into an apprentice of CattailClan. Elkstar also said that Sparrowkit had died. During her apprenticeship, Nightpaw had worked herself to death to prove that she was going to be a great warrior no matter what gender she was. This worsened her relationships within her Clan because Nightpaw had worked herself so much that she either didn't have time to chat or she could hardly muster a "hi" without passing out. By the time her Warrior Cermony came around when she was 12 moons old, Nightcatcher was known as cold and distant. While she was gald that most viewed her as a strong warrior, her relationships fell apart. Blossompaw or, by that time for a long time, Blossomwing didn't really like talking to Nightcatcher anymore. Her brothers were the only ones who forgave Nightcatcher for distancing. Her mother soon died of greencough, stressing Nightcatcher to the point where she felt as though all her fur would go gray. A bit after she was 13 moons old, she finally stopped grieving for her mother's death. She then made herself fight an hunt for her mother. She managed to earn back a few of her old friends. Two moons afterwards, badgers invaded the camp. Nightcatcher's life was ended when she took a deathblow to the neck to protect one of Jayfire's kits. Nightcatcher watched as Jayfire grasped his kit and ran off, full of grief. When Nightcatcher woke up in the path of clouds to GloryClan, she never regretted her death and felt relieved when she saw her mother.

I love all the detail that you put in her backstory, and her transition from Tom to She-cat definitely had a realistic effect on her Clan. It sounds very planned out, and would make for a great story. Maybe, Nightcatcher's Change or Nightcatcher's Hope. Make it, please. I'd totally read it.

Relation to any main characters?: None/None given

Likes: The stars, stories, voles, sleeping with her Clanmates, some space (but not too much), and Catnip/Catmint

Dislikes: Birds, kits, Queens, being called a tom, too much Sun, and breaking the laws of GloryClan (like the Warrior Code)

Strengths: Since her legs are long, she can run quite fast. In hunting, she has the chance of catching her prey even if it begins to run away. Her stealth is also kinda good.

Weaknesses: If seen, she's kinda pretty weak. She could easily be pinned down and her vision isn't very sharp. She'd also rather go whisker first into battle without planning much. Her mews are often raised to a higher pitch most of times, making her out of breath when finishing a long chat.

Extras: -The "Night-" prefix was actually inspired by Nightcatcher's aunt, Nightseed. Nightcatcher was too young to remember much about her, but since Nightseed had been a strong and caring warrior, Nightcatcher decided to use "Night-" as the prefix in her name because she wanted to be exactly like Nightseed.

-The only reason why Nightcatcher hated kits and queens was because she knew that she could never enjoy being a queen with kits of her own.

-Nightcatcher often raises the pitch in her mew to make it sound more feminine. 

-The kit that Nightcatcher saved was named Sparrowkit, he soon became Sparrowcatcher by request.(Sparrowcatcher was actually a representation of what she could have been if she were really a tom.)

-The suffix "-catcher" was given to her because of the fact that Nightcatcher had always caught herself in a deep web of trouble and stress, not because she was a good hunter.

-Her whole Clan had changed to using she/her pronouns after Sparrowkit (Nightcatcher) confessed, but occasionally they'd let a few he/him pronouns slip by accident.

-Nightcatcher's father never died during her life, he just never spoke to her again. Nightcatcher tried talking to him sometimes, but he never looked at her, he ignored her, and felt as though she was the reason why his son "died".

(StarClan in their forest was known as GloryClan by the way, the pathway is a bit different due to being in different forests)

Wow, that is a lot of extra info, and I love it! This OC is amazing! And seriously, I would love to see a story about Night. If you want, I might even be able to help you make a cover for it! Also, this review took a lot longer because I was drawing the picture seen above. I was looking at your character and I felt like I needed to draw her.

I give this OC:
99% Original
1% Changeable