Is Your Warriors OC A Mary-Sue?

Oceanstar

This OC was submitted by ThatCannibalDocter.

Name: Oceanstar/Oceanpelt

Nickname: MeMeep

Dafuq? I honestly don't really understand... but whatever...

Clan/Rank: Leader of SnowClan

Apprentice(s): Mousepaw

Mousepaw couldn't have been the only apprentice she's had. It's against the Warrior Code for. Acat to become deputy without having had trained at least one apprentice unless under very special circumstances.

Gender: She-cat

What's wrong with Tom-cats? Do Tom-cat OC's have an inescapable disease or curse that I don't know about?

Looks: Tortoiseshell she-cat with blue eyes and fluffy fur.

Mate/Kit(s): Kacklepelt/None

What is the name 'Kacklepelt'? What's it supposed to mean?

Sexuality: Homosexual

Age: 20 moons

WAAAYYYY TOOOO YOUUUNNNNNGGGGGGGG!!!

Parents: Aeonstar (of FoxClan)-

Woah, let me stop you there. Just because I put FoxClan as an example FanClan, doesn'tmean you can suddenly be assigning leaders to my Clan. Foxstar is leader of FoxClan. And besides, Oceankit was born to SnowClan, not FoxClan. Parents from different Clans is bad enough, but parents, one of which is a leader, of different Clans is even worse.

And Jellyfur

And what kind of a name is Jellyfur? The Clan cats don't know what jelly is.

Siblings: Dawnsong (Queen), Lionlight (elder), Singpaw, Juniperpaw

I assumed you meant Juniperpaw, considering you said Junpierpaw

Bio/Backstory: She was born on the way to the new territory which only two of her litter mates and her survived. She turned into a appreitince two moons after they got there and had a lot of trouble hunting and fighting. She was made warrior anyways but when her and dawnsong were going through the forest a dog was running towards to attack them and something snapped into her and was able to defend them but has scares form it. She lived her normal life until she was made deputy and watched her own leader die form sickness taking her last life away. She was made leader shortly after

Okay... no where did it mention any apprentices before she was appointed deputy, nowhere did it mention Lionlight or why he's an elder when Dawnsong nor Oceanstar/Oceanpelt are, nowhere did it mention anything like that...

Relation to any main characters?: None

Likes: CatMint, Her clanmates getting along,victory

Dislikes: clanmates getting angry

Strengths: Element of surprise amd tackling.

Weaknesses: Attacking from the front.

Strengths as in what are they good at... as in skills, such as hunting, powerful sense of smell, sharp eyesight, things like that.

Extras: N/A

Okay... this one was honestly a bit hard to get through, especially since I'm sick and highly open to attack of cringe, but I made it through... somehow...

Overall, I give this OC:

35% Original
65% Changeable