Task 2 - IELTS Writing: [Work and study] - (9)

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Đề bài: In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Is this a positive or negative development?

Brainstorm: 

a. Negative

- Students: Put too much emphasis on working 

-> no time for other priorities, especially school work

-> neglect their studying at school 

-> academic performance go downhill

- In addition: have little experience and knowledge about workers' rights

-> vulnerable to labor abuses at workplace

-> suffer from physical or emotional harm

b. Positive

- Gain experience and hone necessary skills: teamwork, communication skills - appreciated by recruiters

-> a contributor to their chance of securing a stable job with a large income

-> Also: promotion prospects would be brighter 

- Moreover: students who struggle financially 

-> having a part-time job: cover expenses and tuition costs

-> be in with a chance of studying further in the future without being a financial burden to families

My essay:

It is true that nowadays, there is a prevailing trend towards doing a job while still learning at school among students. While this phenomenon may have some demerits, I contend that these drawbacks are eclipsed by its considerable benefits.

On the one hand, landing a job can place pupils at some distinct disadvantages. To begin with, students may put too much emphasis on working, which means they can have a lack of time for other priorities, especially schoolwork. Therefore, those pupils are likely to neglect their studying at school, and thus their academic performances may go downhill. In addition to the declining learning quality, working students can be faced with problems occurring in the workplace, most notably abuses. This can be attributed to the fact that adolescents often have little experience and knowledge about workers' rights, rendering them vulnerable to labor abuses. As a result, they are likely to suffer from physical or emotional harm while working.

On the other hand, it is immediately obvious that the aforementioned phenomenon have offered certain benefits. They can gain experience and hone necessary skills including teamwork or communication skills which are appreciated by recruiters. This can be a contributor to their chance of securing a stable job with a large income in the future, and their promotion prospects would be brighter. Moreover, for students who have to struggle financially, having a part-time job is the optimal way to cover expenses and tuition costs. The implication of this is that they can be in with a chance of studying further without being a burden to their families. For example, thousands of Vietnamese students opt to work part-time on account of their financial problems, and by this way, they can earn not only money but also comprehensive knowledge for future jobs.

In conclusion, while there are numerous reasons to stand against students' act of working while are still at schools, I believe that this is a positive development for both individuals and society. To fortify the profound impacts of this trend, pupils should be allowed to do a limited number of jobs which are suitable for their abilities and timetable under close supervision from families and schools.

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