Warrior cats OC Rater (FINISHED)

Asterlight

NAME: Asterlight

I don't think I've ever seen Aster before! It's quite unique, light is not common but still used quite a lot as a suffix. I like the mix of names! (9.5/10)

GENDER: Born she-cat. Is a trans tom.

Cool :) Don't see those everyday.

SEXUALITY: Pan-Demisexual

I had to search that up...

CLAN: ValleyClan

I guess they live in a valley then... I find it a bit strange clans are just named about where they live, maybe try name it after something else, but Valley is very rarely used. Nice! (8.5/10)

APPEARANCE: Slightly fluffy creamish-white tom with unnerving/piercing pale green eyes. Has a couple of scars on his belly and some smaller ones on his chest.

Maybe add some other colours to him, completely white is quite rare and considered as Mary-Sue but there has to be some white cats so yeah, thats fine but if you don't mind maybe add some colour. I find it hard to imagine pale green eyes to be piercing, but cats don't usually have bright green eyes. I do like the scars, I read the backstory but it didn't say anything about the scars, would like to hear about how he got them. I like it! (8/10)

ATTITUDE/REPUTATION: He's the leader-type of cat, and is quite quick on his feet. He has no trouble with making decisions on his own, he's polite and level headed. He's quite blunt, and isn't afraid to speak his mind. He feels that a cat should know the truth, even if it's not completely right. He has a hard time empathising, even if he feels emotional for the cat. He's intelligent, but hold grudges. He's a Grump (tm).

This is very interesting, I really appreciate how he is blunt and independent, not something that you normally see. He's a grump and I like it. His attitude is awesome, though I suggest you to add more good traits, he hardly has any. (9/10)

FAMILY:

Mother: Milkygaze- Pale long furred she-cat with blind amber eyes.

Father: Blizzardtuft-White and grey tabby tom with pale green eyes (deceased)

Siblings:

Softwhisker- Sleek cream she-cat with amber eyes.

Lyremask- White tom with grey splotches on his face (green eyes)

These names are unique and cool, I can see where they got their genetics form, but I think should change Milkygaze's name a bit, her eyes are amber so maybe have a prefix like Amber or Blur, I don't know, milky doesn't seem to fit amber eyes. (9.5/10)

BACKSTORY: He grew up a fairly normal life, with nothing out of the ordinary. Born a she-cat, once they became an apprentice, he really didn't seem to 'fit' into his gender. And due to being born female, he noticed he was being treated differently than the male apprentices. Determined to prove his worth, Asterpaw(at the time) worked hard, and revealed that they wanted to be a tom. Encouraged by friends and family, Asterpaw/light did just that. His parents died due to disease a little bit after he became a warrior. He wasn't very close with his sister, and didn't bother to attempt to be close. Focused on his duties, Asterlight was always caught up in attempting to make the Clan as best as it could possibly be for his clanmates, eventually getting sucked up into a never-ending cycle of being a workaholic.

Wow...

(cue hippy voice) Thats deep man...

I feel like that this is close to the typical transgender story, but I do like the way that he becomes a workaholic and I guess he didn't get a mate due to being one, I like that since most OCs get a mate. This is pretty good, just add a few tweaks to make it a bit more dramatic other than the typical transgender drama, but all in all it's still pretty good (9/10)

OTHER FACTS: He likes wearing flower crowns, surprisingly. But dislikes bugs, and humidity (as it makes his fur fluff up)

That's very unique! But how does he make the flower crowns? The rest is probably good enough to fit into the personality section. Can't give scores for these doe.

DRUM ROLL PLZZZZ

53.5/60! (89.1666667%)

This character is great, they're amazing and welly fleshed out, just need a few tweaks and it will be awesome!

Sorry this took a while, I was on holiday