Softindigo

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Name: Softindigo
That is really unique! Soft is a nice prefix but Indigo is something I have almost never in an OC, points for creativity but Indigo seems to be more of a prefix than a suffix, the name doesn't exactly roll off the tongue, maybe Softflower, it has a similar meaning if you meant Indigo as in the flower, but it's your choice. (8/10)
Age: 26 moons (2 years and 2 months)
Cewl
Gender: she-cat
Nice
Sexuality: lesbiono
Beautiful typo
Clan: thunderclan( was originally part of The olive tree cult)
Nice, since you did include a group that you made yourself, I might as well rate it,  The Olive Tree Cult is nice and simple, I would be lying if I said I didn't chuckle at the name a bit, it sounds funny, but still decent and nice, I like the creativity with a new group name other than using tribe or clan and after reading the other facts section, I think that the name is great and has reason to it (10/10)
Appearance: lavender Siamese she-cat. She is small and oddly short. She has frost blue eyes (and before you say anything. This is a real eye color. An eye color that is unique to lavender's. That I would you that before you deduct points for unrealistic eye color.)
I'm glad you did research on Softindigo's appearance! Judging by her description, I guess she looks like any other regular lavender Siamese, maybe add something more to it like at her special markings or scars. (9.5/10)
Rank: queen
That's not something you see everyday
Personality: she is a quiet she-cat and very wary and jumpy(I need to stop making jumpy characters it has become a problem. I need help) she is very wary of her surroundings. She is seen as mysterious because she refuses to talk about her past
Jumpy characters (I just want to say, several times, I almost wrote humpy characters) are used regularly like you said, maybe add some more to her, especially positive traits, maybe being a good huntress or being helpful and smart. (8/10)
Family:

Mother: The shadow,
Father: unknown,
Sister: The kitten
Mate: Fleetfoot,
Kits: Olivekit
Was her sister unnamed or was she called The Kitten for the rest of her life (okay ignore that I just read the last bit)? (Probably the first one) I see that the cats from the cult have names different to the ones in regular clans, the names are simple but maybe you can add their looks and details. (9/10)
Backstory: she was starving. The kitten and her sister The kitten have not eaten since the day they left for the holy land their land The Oracle has promised his followers. The place they lived in before was perfect but The Oracle has said that a new holy land has to found for The Listener has gotten a prophecy saying that the gods have found them a new holy land and they must go to it and claim it as their own. No matter the cost. after moons of empty bellies. They have found it. Just as the omen has for told. A quiet forest with a big lake that shine up to the stars. Clear and perfect. The kitten couldn't believe her eyes. She had made it. If only her sister could be here. The kitten has died due to starvation and The Oracle said that it was going to happen anyway. That the kit was too small and weak to survive so there was no reason to bury her. It was soon found out that there were already cats here. Living on the holy land. And their was a lot of them. The Oracle has decided that a message must be given to them so that those cats leave and they take over the holy land. After delivering the message The Oracle has stated that these cats made it easy for them. All he did was kill a weak tom and tell an old she-cat what to tell her very large family. Everyone was hiped. Ready to fight for the holy land. The gods have given it to them. These cats had no right to be there. The kitten was only 5 moons and she found it hard to believe their kind leader killed someone. In vain. She wanted no part of this. But three other kitten from another leader said they have every right to do this. Soon The Oracle started planning an attack. And She was chosen to part take in the battle. A 5 moons kitten. The other kittens started becoming bitter and jealous. Saying that the kitten was far too small to fight and she would die in an instant. And she believed them knowing her death was near she did not fight when the battle began. All around cats were fighting. She had no idea there would be this many. And she realized The olive branch cult was highly out numbered. Suddenly a tom came up to her. Expecting death she did not fight back. But she suddenly found her self being lifted. She looked up to see a Gray spotted tabby carrying her and a black tom yelling something she didn't couldn't hear over the fighting. The she-cat told her to relax. That she would get help soon. And after awhile of being carried. She drifted to sleep. Moons have passed sinced than, and she has learned a lot. The battle was won by the cats who already lived here. Who she learned to the 5 clans. And she was accepted into one of then. Thunderclan. She found very quickly that clan life was much better than the starved life in The olive tree cult. She was given a new name. Softkit. And when she was old enough she became softpaw. Then Softindigo. The black tom who found her during the battle happened to be a tom named Fleetfoot. And she grew a liking to him he was young and spunky. She liked him. She even ended up having a kit with him a she- cat who she named Olivekit. After The olive tree cult. She was happy to be part of this clan. Something she was not when she was part of The olive tree cult.
Aw that's cute, her life has had some ups and downs, it's well developed maybe add some more to her clan life, she's had so much excitement in her kithood. (9/10)
Other: fun facts. In Christianity the olive tree is s symble of peace. Which is Ironic because The olive tree cult is anything but peaceful. Also. Kits are seen as less than grown cats which is why they all have the same name. The kitten.
Oh, that's interesting!
Books: not any yet but will be in the up coming series Warriors the wall of fire.
Can't wait :D

And the final score isss...
53.5/60 (89.16667%)
All in all, Softindigo is a well made OC, I am glad you put so much effort into researching for her, she only needs a few very minor tweaks.
Thank you TheStartlingSwallow for another great entry!

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