Warrior cats OC Rater (FINISHED)

Vapordusk

Name: Vapordusk
I love this name, I always thought of making a cat with the prefix Vapour (I'm Aussie, that's how I spell it), also, Vapour and Dusk go together very well, but, since Vapour is a prefix never used in the actual books so we can't be entirely sure that the cats know what Vapour is. (9/10)
Gender and sexuality: He's a tom, and he is Bisexual.
Noice
Clan: TimberClan
Timber is a name used very often in Clan names, I have seen it again and again so maybe you could try to be more original and try something else. (5/10)
Appearance: A gray and white splotched medicine cat tom with pitch black stripes and forest green eyes.
That's a pretty nice appearance, it's a bit hard to imagine a cat with splotches and then black tabby stripes over it. (7.5/10)
Attitude: He is extremely self-aware, and he hates younger warriors. He is constantly judging himself, and feels that he is not pushing himself hard enough, resulting in him being very tired all the time. He usually acts bitter and emotionless towards cats who talk to him, and he is very quiet.
Can someone count for me how many times I have to tell someone to give their character more positive traits? There are Mary Sues that have only good traits, but that doesn't mean you can't have good traits, despite that, I don't normally see traits like this, they go quite well together and is rarely used. (7/10)
Family:
Doestream- Light brown and cream spotted she-cat with warm amber eyes; the mother.
Nightstripe- Dark gray tom with black stripes and dark green eyes; the father. No siblings, mate or kits.
Love the names, the descriptions are nice and detailed but maybe you can make it so their pelt colours can show bits of relation to Vapourdusk's, Nightstripe has the black stripes and green eyes but maybe put some white and grey on Doestream. (7.5/10)
Backstory: Vapordusk was teased by fellow kits in his kithood for being long and skinny. He was struck down by this, and became a medicine cat apprentice because he thought he wasn't cutout to be a warrior. He learned well, but he has never truly accepted his role as a medicine cat. He shares little connection with StarClan. He despises the kits who teased him, who are now young warriors. They are the reason he hates new warriors so much. In this timeline cats did not yet know about Yellowcough, and the Clan suffered a Yellowcough plague, which Vapordusk died in at only 30 moons old, leaving the clan with no medicine cat.
Oh wow, he must hold grudges for a long time, if he is a main oc that you're going to use in a book, maybe add some more action and drama in his story, but this is a nice and unique story that you don't normally see. (7.5/10)
Others/Facts: He has long talon marks going down his back from almost being carried off by an owl as a kit.
Woah

And the final score iiisss

43.5/60 (72.5%)
All in all, I really like Vapourdusk but he does need a few tweaks, but I really like how his character is set up.
Thank you @NyahCreek for the glamorous entry!