Warrior cats OC Rater (FINISHED)

Cedarmist

@HamiltonNHestia

Name- Ceadermist
Cedar is used quite a bit but not overly common, the same with mist but this combination is actually pretty nice! (9/10)
Gender- Tom
Sexuality- Pansexual
Clan- TimberClan
Timber...that's actually used quite a lot in clans, it's quite common to be honest. (5/10)
Appearance- A lithe fawn tabby tom with bright hazel eyes, and medium length fur. He has a long tail , is polydactyl (has an extra toe), and has small scars on his front right leg from a thorn bush
AMAZING
I love this, he has nothing too Mary or Gary sue about him, I have never seen a polydactyl warrior OC before and he doesn't have scars from a battle or anything, just an innocent bush, but even though I did say there was nothing too Mary Sue about him, do try adding some more colour. (9.5/10)
Attitude/Reputation- He is quick witted, and often snarky and sarcastic, but is one of the best healers the clans have ever had. He tends to be grumpy in the morning, preferring the evening and night time, and has a quick temper, but once he befriends someone he will go to any lengths, even killing someone, to make sure they are safe
This grumpy is common but I like grumpy cats, don't normally a medicine cat who will probably kill, but do try adding more positive attitudes. (8.5/10)
Family-Mother- Herrondust: a lithe cream she-cat with darker specks, dark green eyes, and medium length fur. She is also polydactyl, and has a long scar across her stomach from a battle many moons ago against RidgeClan
Father- Pebbleblaze: a cinnamon tabby tom with hazel eyes, and short fur. He has a long tail and several scars all over his legs from the battle with RidgeClan
Siblings-Pinestripe: a cream tabby tom with hazel eyes, and short fur. He has his fathers long tail, and part of his tail torn off from a skirmish with a fox
Mapleheart: a cinnamon she-cat with darker specks, green eyes, and short fur. She is polydactyl aswell, and has a scar on her back left leg from the fox skirmish
ALL THE KITS ARE TREES YAY.
I can see where they got their looks from, these names are awesome and they are quite detailed, can you tell me what rolls they are in? cool! (9.5/10)
Backstory- Cedermist was the runt of his litter, but only slightly, but because of this his siblings felt the need to protect him. Pinekit and Maplekit would hover around him constantly, and because of this he grew quite close to his siblings. Along with playing with his siblings, one of his favorite pastimes was listening to the elders stories. They would weave magical tales of the battle between them and there rival, RidgeClan. We would listen intently to there stories, and aspired to be a warrior and help his clan. Fate had another plan for him. He was so excited when he, and his siblings were going to become apprentices... TBC

He sat proudly, waiting expectantly. He knew he would get a great mentor who would train him, and help him grow. He watched as Pinekit, now Pinepaw was assigned Reedflame, and Maplekit, now Maplepaw, got assigned Ashnose, then he was called. He listened as his leader spoke. His heart filled with dread. He heard his mentors name, and it was not a great warrior. It wasn't even a not-so-great warriors. It was Fernwhisker, the medicine cat. He had no clue why he was chosen. He never really liked medicine, but even though his heart told him no, stop, no, he knew StarClan knew what he was meant to be. During his apprenticeship he slowly became more irritable, and snappy, but he learned so much. He soaked up all the information like a sponge. He worked and worked, and slowly began to enjoy it. He grew to like his mentor, Fernwhisker. She was hard not to like. She was extremely nice, and helpful. The definition of a medicine cat. The exact opposite of Cedarpaw. Even though he grew to love his work his grouchy side lingered. Soon he earned his full name, Ceadermist for his spray of specks resembling mist. Not long after Ashnose rushed into the medicine cat den with his siblings in tow. She explained the situation with the fox, and Ceadermist rose to the occasion quickly taking care of his siblings. Several more cats came in soon after with more fox related injuries, which he also took in stride. A couple moons later his sister, now Mapleheart came to him crying, telling him that her mate of ten moons had left her for a new, prettier she-cat. He quickly rose to his paws and found the culprit. He approached the other cat and hissed at him telling him to stay away from his sister and swated him across the nose, then promptly left to comfort his sister. Many moons later Fernwhisker died of old age, in her sleep and Ceadermist grieved her death for many moons and still has yet to fully recover. Umm you didn't have rank as one so med cat I don't have a book for him... Yet Done!
His backstory is pretty nice but try adding some more dramatic content, most of the drama seems to be happening with his siblings, but this is nice and fleshed out. (8/10)

The final score issss....
Drumroll pleeeeeeease....
(49.5/60)!!!! (Or 82.5%)
All in all, this cat is well made but needs some tweaks, such as some more drama and maybe achange of clan name.