Name: Petaltail
Petal is quite regularly used and so is tail, maybe you could change the suffix into something more unique, like cloud or fall (6.5/10)
Gender: Female
Mhmm
Sexuality: Straight
Kay
Clan: Blazeclan
Blaze isn't used quite regularly neither is it used...not regularly, but personally, I am quite fond of the name Blazeclan. (7.5/10)
Appearance: A pretty dilute long haired colored calico with golden and silver she cat with white paws,white underbelly,Petal shaped ears,long fluffy tail,Pale blue eyes
Her appearance doesn't exactly suit her name, maybe Petalear may suit her better, with that aside, the description is nice and detailed so so kudos to you for that, maybe add some scars or other unique things, what's her eye colour? (7.5/10)
Attitude: She is calm and relaxed and has a Friendly and over all nice and kind personality. She is Shy and quiet typically being off to herself or hanging out in the medicine cat den with juniperpaw,she loves kits and younger apprentice and likes to play and help them out.
Her personality work together quite well but maybe add some more negative traits that fit like being naive or too trusting.
(7.5/10)
Reputation: Her reputation in the clan that she is the good hearted cat that Can defend herself and warriors. She is the first warrior to go and defend the queens and kits making her a clan favorite and rather popular with younger Warriors,apprentice and kits. Generally Observant And wise and complete loves giving out affection and love to cats however she gets embarrassed from the attention others cats especially Juniperpaw give her.
That's quite nice, though all her positive traits and lack of flaws make her seem like a Mary Sue, maybe you could add some things negative about her but I don't always see a cat that is popular and it is quite interesting. (6.5/10)
Family:
LillyThorn- A black and white tortoiseshell shecat with white paws,bright green eyes
Berrytail- a cream and white Tom with Blue
Siblings
Rosepaw- a ginger and white Tabby Shecat with green eyes
Whitepetal- a cream and white Tomm with blue eyes
Mate: Lightingcloud- A white Tom with golden eyes,a black line across his back,scars and cuts across his flank and a cut in his ear
Kits: Marigoldkit- white and tortoiseshell Shecat with golden eyes Daisykit- a White and cream shecatw you pale bright blue eyes
Rosepaw appearance don't seem to have any resemblance to her parents, Petaltail has some matching genetics but some of her hold no resemblance of genetics from her parents, with that aside, love the names and the rest of the genetics work really well. (7/10)
Others She died before she could give birth to her kit,her kits were born in starclan She was known to be the center of Juniperleaf's affection She was a Down syndrome cat Her sibling whitepetal had autism Rosepaw was Deaf Her kits don't have Down syndrome. Fears Drowning, fire, dying, the dark forest
Oh, that's quite interesting!
Backstory: She was born in a small litter of two shecats and one toms,She was born differently than her siblings with Eye spaced apart from each each other,her parents and siblings loved her for being different since her siblings were different than The others cats as well and named her for her beauty as petalkit As an apprentice she was known to be a little slow and was often picked on for it,she was expected not to Make it thru as an apprentice but she made it as a warrior showing the other cats that she had skills as well. One day she was fighting a cat in a battle along side her future mate,when she got injured and headed out to the medicine cat den where she met Juniperpaw and they hit off right away. She wasn't aware of Juniperpaw love for her as time went off but Petaltail did her best to help Juniperpaw with his mental illness as they got closer. A battle came by as Petaltail was unknown about her pregnancy and fought in it. She died before she could give birth
Book Juniper's story,Bipolar
So I guess she's more of a background character but still plays a part in the story, her love with a medicine cat seems quite cliche but at least it wasn't taken too far, since she's not a main character I guess it's fine she doesn't have so much going in her life. (7/10)And the final score iiiissssss....
49.5/70 (70.71%)
All in all, Petaltail is an okay character who needs quite a bit of fixing up due to her seeming a bit like a Mary Sue but I'm sure she'll turn out as a brilliant character, thank you @Spottedclaw1234 for the amazing entry, I apologise for the long time it took for me to finally find some time to get back to writing these, I'm still quite busy at the moment so there might still be a long wait before the next one, sorry :") have a nice day!
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