Rose Reviews

Scripted

Author:
HumptyHotPotpotz

Title:
Scripted

Genre:
Fantasy

Mature:
Swearing and violence. I wouldn't call it mature but that's just me.

Cover and Title: 2.5/5
If I was judging the title alone I'd have given it a 4/5. It's a very unique title and fits very well, I only had to dock a point because for a long time I couldn't figure out why it fit and I was distracted from the story trying to figure out what Scripted meant.

As for the cover, the color was a little meh and not very eye catching. The words were a bit hard to make out. As for the image behind the words? I couldn't make that out at all. I still don't know what it is. Although books shouldn't be judged by their cover, they are. Make sure it's a good judgement.

Great title, but a not so great cover. I'd say with a different cover this section would get full points.

Blurb: 3/5
It got pretty info dumpy. The blurb was just too long and there was too much information. It gave away a lot away and even worse, with all the information being thrown at me, most of it didn't make sense. There were also quite a few typos that made me wary going in.

First Impressions: 4/5
I'm trying to keep this spoiler free because I recommend reading it!

The first couple paragraphs of the prologue didn't particularly catch my attention. It had some similar problems to the prologue. The description was wonderful, but it dragged on with little excitement. I can excuse this because you've done something few people can do: create your own world!

And once we met Voice and Noise by impression completely changed! I could not think of a better way to start a fantasy novel. These absolutely chilling characters completely grabbed my attention. The seen with them and the human boy was outstandingly written and beautifully illustrated.

I'd consider shortening the part before they began their conversation, but keep the rest exactly the same.

Characters: 5/5
Firstly, your character names are outstanding! They are so unique! I apologize for spelling them wrong, but take it as a compliment because I've never heard of them! You'll need to tell me, did you make them up? Or do they mean something?

All your characters were excellent! They each had such unique and individual personalities. I appreciate the way you portrayed Cario and Nard's brother relationship. Their banter was very amusing. I think my favorite characters were Kallus and Anaca were probably my favorites. Still, Voice and Noise resonated with me the most.

Grammar: 4/5
Nothing major. Some missed commas or oddly phrased sentences. Just give it another read through. Once or twice I think you changed tenses for a word but I might be wrong? The blurb had several more typos than any of the chapters put together.

Plot: 5/5
As I said before, creating a world, especially a fantasy world, is something I hold to the utmost respect. Perhaps because I've done it myself, but not nearly as successfully as you have. There were so many elements of magic I can't begin to describe! The time you put into this is very apparent. Consider me impressed.

Overall: 3.9/5 or 23.5/30
I'd recommend this to any lover of high fantasy! Seriously, check it out! You won't regret it.

Sorry if you thought this was harsh or you expected a better score.