Author: @MistickMage
Title: Dragon Blood
Genre: fantasy
Mature: No
Cover and Title: 2.5/5
The title is fine, a little bland, but fine.
The cover looks pretty juvenile, like cartoony. I think you could definitely use a new one.
Blurb: 3/5
It was okay, but the writing was a little bland. There were a few sentences that read awkwardly.
First Impressions: 3/5
The italicized part felt pretty info-dumpy, and I felt you rushed Gwyn finding out about her dragon blood.
Characters: 3/5
I really liked Argus and Isaac, but I had some trouble getting invested in Gwyn. I think you need to explain more why she doesn't want to be a Dragon Rider. That would also serve to make the beginning less rushed, plus it would give me more reason to understand her qualms.
Grammar: 3.5/5
While there weren't many, though some, grammar mistakes, it was pretty good. There were also some choppy sentences. Another issue I had was that while the grammar wasn't wrong, the writing felt very young. It was sparse, no imagery and very little description.
Plot: 4/5
I liked the idea of the dragon blood and being descendent of dragons. I don't think this works as a short story. You have a lot more room to develop the word and characters, which isn't utilized nearly enough because of the short length. Go into details and milk your word for all it's worth.
Overall: 3.16/5 or 19/30
YOU ARE READING
Rose Reviews
RandomOPEN BUT REVIEWS WILL BE SLOW Want a story reviewed? Here's where to go! I will be brutally honest, but polite. I'm not here to tell you your story is terrible, but I'm here to tell you how to improve. I will not sugarcoat your flaws, but I will poi...
