Author: Restuva
Title: The Island Confederation
Genre: fantasy
Mature: mild violence and lots of swearing, but not mature by my standards.
Cover and Title: 2/5
I'd say both need some work. Neither the title nor the cover at all reference the high fantasy world within. I would never have expected to be reading a story with elves and war etc.
Blurb: 4/5
Not bad at all. Maybe just make it longer.
First Impressions: 5/5
The poem was beautiful. Your poems are by far the my favorite parts. And then the first paragraph of chapter one certainly made me laugh. My only comment was a grammar issue with the first part of the prologue.
Characters: 3/5
While I found Berrékél's (I apologize for spelling) narration very amusing, it made the character seem a bit annoying. A bit of complaining is certainly justified, but all the swearing and griping got a bit overboard. Also, in my personal opinion, it took way too long to figure out if what the gender and name of the main character is.
Still, I really liked your elves and the names were extremely unique.
Grammar: 4.5/5
Just a few missed commas.
Plot: 3.5/5
I appreciate all the world building, but it all moved too fast. I was left grappling to figure out what was happening, and the other languages just made me more confused. Please take more time to explain all the aspects of the world.
Overall: 3.7/5 or 22/30
Great for anyone who loves fantasy and is excellent at catching onto the finer points of a world.
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