Bloodshed Island - The Carnage Chronicles - DarkRain1002
JUDGE: kalyons
Review: I personally don't like to read about torture even if there aren't many detail, but I'm sure someone who likes yours isn't bothered by it and will love your book. Look over your work for mistakes where commas should go. Also, I noticed that there are a few mistakes in capitalization. It's only little things, and I couldn't find anything big. I liked it the more I read it. I didn't like how dark the beginning was, but it was definitely an attention grabber, and I'm sure many people will like the beginning of the story. I also like the detail you put into the story.
JUDGE: Oceane_Breeze
- Bloodshed Island is very action packed to say the least. This story pulls you in.
- The grammar was nearly perfect and there were no noticeable spelling mistakes.
- The characters were very accurate and were easy to become attached to. I loved Troy especially.
- The plot was well done and couldn't be considered cliche. I'm not a fan of the cliche, so that was an extra bonus with this story. There isn't much to criticize besides a few small grammar errors. This was a well done story that has the potential to be great read here on Wattpad.
JUDGE: Jason_Tenjiro
Feedback: I'm assuming that this isn't the first book out of the series and even if it is, I'd still like to say a few things. It is a little sudden describing the protagonist as bisexual without further commentary like the person she thinks she likes would feel the same, which sounds a little cliche but it's just an example. Besides that, good grammar, interesting plot, and keep it up
Dead Beat - MolayneMelody
JUDGE: kalyons
Review: I really like it! I'll definitely keep reading it, and I can't wait to see what happens. I was so into the story that I kept forgetting to judge and had to force myself not to vote on every chapter. I didn't notice many grammar mistakes. The most I really noticed when I forced myself to look for mistakes was that there were a few comma errors, so go back over the book after the contest and pay attention to comma placement. At first, I thought the characters were going to be very similar if not that exact same, but the more I read, the more I saw their individual personalities. You did a very good job with this book.
JUDGE: Oceane_Breeze
I didn't know what to expect when I first read this, but it was excellent. The grammar was flawless and I saw no mistakes. The characters were genuine and were very easy to sympathize with.
My favorite thing about this story was the descriptions. I could visualize everything.
A secret military group is not unique, but that aspect was nicely done.
The only negative thing about this book was the language. I felt it overpowered the story with a swear being inserted every other word. Sometimes language can help convey the emotion someone is feeling, but in this story it was just too overpowering.
All together, this story was amazing and a great one to read.
JUDGE: Jason_Tenjiro
Feedback: Holy cow, this was an intense read! I've had my fair share of high level action movies and novels, and I'd say that this is one of them. In my opinion, it's almost too intense, but still really good.
Deception - AreeshaKhaled
JUDGE: kalyons
Review: It's not really my cup of tea, but I'm sure people who like to read books like this would like it. I have to honestly say that I'm surprised that you entered this into a competition when you know the book needs editing. You even put that it needs editing in the introduction. Sorry if that sounds rude, but I'm being honest. Since it wasn't edited, it cost you points. While you are waiting for someone to volunteer to do some in depth editing, you should fix the mistakes you see or know are there. Some of the sentences can be reworded to make it flow more, and some individual words can be changed to make the sentence flow better as well. Also, when writing dialog, you should write who is speaking and make sure to put the correct punctuation with the dialog. Another thing to change is when you write actual numbers. You need to write out the numbers such as writing 'two' instead of '2.'
