I critic my "mostly" old stories. (I promise I've gotten better at writing over the years.)
Most of them are pretty dumb and funny. :)
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Some of these have triggers, which I will try to warn for.
A lot of the stuff I planned on reviewing is either:
1. Really cringing and brings back a lot of bad memories from when I wrote it.
2. Most of the stuff that I'd be okay with reviewing is really short or still being worked on.
So I've decided that after a few more reviews, I'm going on a little break from this story. I'll come back when I have so more stuff to review.
Today's review is of a script I wrote (sadly never finished) of a Gacha movie I wanted to make. I assumed a lot of fancy and extra editing would come with making a fantasy or science fiction Gacha story, so I took the easy route and left my comfort zone to write a story in a boring world without magic.
Here's the summary. (This was never posted anywhere, and I'm taking this from the notes app on my Phone.)
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Without further ado, enjoy!
Characters:
-Stephen Madison
-Fluer Beaumont Madison
-Hatterine "Hattie" Madison
-Howard "Howie" Madison
-Eloise Beaumont
-Anthony
-Cheryl
-Felix Sourcomb
-Oliver Hart
Part 1
(Opens at a party with HATTIE MADISON, MOTHER MADISON, DADDY MADISON, and HOWARD MADISON all greeting rich guests. HATTIE wears a ridiculous hat.)
Fun Fact: The idea of having a hat focused story has been in my mind for years, ever since I made a comic in 5th grade that I called "House of Hats".
Mr. Sourcomb: Ah, Mr. Madison. What a delight to see you here.
I probably should started out by labeling Mr. Sourcomb as "Felix Sourcomb" and Mr. Madison as "Stephen Madison", rather than changing it halfway throughout the script.
Mr. Madison: You too, Mr. Sourcomb.
Mr. Sourcomb: Please, call me by my first name, Felix.
I headcanon that Stephen accidentally calls him Mr. Sourcomb a lot, even though Felix and him on first name basis with each other.
Mr. Madison: Right... *visible discomfort*
Wait, why is there visible discomfort? I'm guessing it's because they're in public and Stephen's wife is around he's uncomfortable around her, but that seems really odd and I don't know why I included it.
