This one is 10000+ words.
Please check out the previous parts on Disaster Paradise since this is the *last* part in the series!
Yet another Critic Book ExclusiveTM.
Once again not all the OCs belong to me.
*NOTICE! Parts of this story have been edited or completely deleted due to how bad they originally were. I will not elaborate because I'm embarrassed by it. Just know that this is not the raw version like all the other stories.
TW: blood, death, gore, violence, swearing, insults and rude language, knives, intentional self endangerment, accidental misgendering, suicide mention, sex jokes and sexual comments,
Commentary will be like {this} again.
Also this is the final part. I think I finally turned 13 when I wrote this one, but it's still a bit cringy.
Ø: Prolonge
{The final Prolonge. 😢}
Ash POV~~~~
{So Game 4 takes place in an alternate universe (I think) and non of the previous games have happened. Also this game features the extended Transparent Stars group & some others.}
I woke up in a classroom. I didn't remember how I got there, either. I made my way outside and saw another person.
Ash: Hey! Do up you know how I got here? I can't remember.
???: None of us can!
Ash: Us? More people are here?
???: Yep.
Ash: Are you, by any chance, an Ultimate too?...
{I don't know if that's where I would go with a conversation with a stranger, but okay.}
???: Obviously!
Ash: What's your talent, then?
???: You want me to tell you my talent? I'm sorry, I need to hear your talent first. I wouldn't just give out my talent to a stranger.
Ash: Oh. In that case, I'm Ash. The Ultimate Observer.
???: What do you do? Tell government officials that bananas are yellow?
{Someone has to do it.}
Ash: N-No! It's like a Detective...
???: But the title of Ultimate Detective is probably already taken so your the Ultimate Observer. Cool.
Ash: Wait weren't you just insulting my talent?!!
???: Was I?
Ash: ...um...
???: Anyway, I'm Echo. The Ultimate Misfortune! Want something bad to happen to someone? Easy. Lock me in the room with them and they'll be in a body bag in less than an hour!~
{I hoping that's an exaggeration. Because that's kinda sad.}
Ash: I'm going to talk with the others now...
{Ash got scared of his bad luck.}
Echo: Counting us, there's 15 total students.
I went to talk to the other people who were also trapped here. I noticed one person standing in a corner alone, so I decided to talk to them.
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