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Fanfic Review: It all began with once upon a time

Type Of Story: 1D

Author: alerriejustine08

Story Rating Estimation: PG-13

Reads: 91.4K

Votes: 948

Comments: ...

Description: Its Niall and Hannah's story. most of it :) but there are Harry and Jamie too! and some Liam Danielle and Louis Eleanor, Josh is a part too! even Zayn ofcourse and Lucia. <3

Suggested If: you want to read a long, completed fanfic

My Review: Okay...the plot is extremely clichè, goes by incredibly fast, and it's choppy and jumps around a lot. It looks like it's your first fanfic, but it needs a LOT of work. Like, a lot a lot. Your chapters could be longer, but I'm kinda grateful for the short reads. Also, your grammar and spelling needs a hell of a lot of work. Your biggest issue is dialogue...you literally did not use a single quotation mark in your story. Unless you're writing a play, you NEED quotation marks for dialogue. Also, there were several your/you're and there/their/they're mistakes, spelling errors, and the lack of commas and apostrophes, which are essential. Overall...I'd definitely work on everything.

Note to Author: Congrats on completing the story though

Rating (1-5): 0.5

Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)