Type Of Story: 5SOS
Author: SavedByMusic
Story Rating Estimation: PG-13
Reads: 2.4K
Votes: 159
Comments: ...
Description: Bella loves her brother Michael so much, and his friends Ashton, Calum, and Luke are all amazing, sweet guys that she loves to hang out with. But Bella has a dark secret, and it seems that going on is getting harder every day. Will Luke be able to make Bella feel like she belongs?
Suggested If: you want to read a sad Luke AU
My Review: The plot is incredibly clichè and they jump from haters to lovers really, really fast. Also, what the hell is with fanfics and car crashes and comas?! It's incredibly overdone, to the point where it's actually annoying. I do like your varying chapter lengths and your grammar and spelling is okay, but it needs some work. Mainly, you need to work on dialogue separation and when to use apostrophes. Also, you ALWAYS capitalize the "I" in "I," "I'm, "I'd," etc. Overall this story wasn't the worst thing ever, but it could use some work.
Note to Author: if you ever plan on writing another story, come up with a more original plot
Rating (1-5): 2
Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)
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