Type Of Story: Markiplier
Author: ThatoneMarkipliergrl
Story Rating Estimation: PG-13
Reads: 1.9K
Votes: 112
Comments: ...
Description: 12 year old Melody Fisser has stayed in a orphanage almost her whole life. The only things that stopped her from ending it all was her favorite youtuber Markiplier. But what happens when she finally gets adopted?
Suggested If: you want to read a Markiplier fic
My Review: There are three things I can say about the plot: it's cliche/unrealistic, it jumps around a lot, and makes no sense whatsoever. In what world would a single man in his mid twenties, who's famous on YouTube, adopt a TWELVE year old? Yeah, twelve year olds are immature children (this coming from a 17 year old), but why the hell would he adopt an immature preteen and not a small child or infant? It makes no sense. Your chapters are incredibly short and your grammar and spelling needs a lot of work-you need to work on dialogue and paragraph separation, punctuation, and your/you're and there/their/they're. Overall, this fanfic needs a lot of work!
Note to Author: One word: Edit
Rating (1-5): 0
Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)
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