Author Games: Circle

Task One | Scores, Notes, and Rankings

We've both given you a score on a scale of 12, and then averaged the two together to get the final score, which you will find under your name. Everyone will receive feedback on their entries, but probably only for this task - a meld of something we both have to say in terms of constructive criticism about your entries. If you're curious as to why you scored the way you did, there's a rubric back in the rules chapter.

After everyone's scores and notes have been listed, there will be a rankings board. Remember that no one is eliminated this task, but it's probably good to know where you stand.

Additionally, we may give out some bonus points at the end of every task, which you'll find here:

[+1 First Entry] - Incredibly early, Robin Laverne takes the extra point.

[+0.5 Word Count] - This task, we came up with a word count all to ourselves and had you guess. The mystery number was, in fact, 1,892. The person who wrote closest to that amount - Flynn Rhoads, with 1,810 - won.

Oh, and also, if you didn't include the password when signing up, you lost half a point. That won't be too good on the scores, now, will it?

----------------------

1 // IVY DEVLIN

Score - 9.25

Notes - To start off, we'd like to note that this entry was very calm for the most part, and we thought that fit in extremely well with the character. Grammatically, it's fine, and the descriptions were aesthetically pleasing. Also, the recurring "Ivy Devlin has seen many things" line gave Shay actual chills. What hurt you most, though, was how you barely touched on the actual task. The end felt very glanced over, while your exposition went on and on and on. You would've scored higher had more of the actual task been incorporated.

~~~

2 // ALLOY PIRRIE

Score - 9.75

Notes - The most distinct aspect of this entry was the style and the tone that came out of that style, something that kept things fresh and made it an interesting read overall. Granted, we kind of had to throw grammar out the window to score it, but we knew that you had a tight grasp on grammar rules by looking at other bits and pieces of your entry, so you're good to go. We weren't quite sure if the detached feel of the entry was intentional, though; while we know Alloy has these hit-you-in-your-face lines giving off his mental process, we'd like to get to know him a little better, beyond those.

~~~

3 // ELLIOT KROLL

Score - 9.75

Notes - Alright, so I guess we can all mutually agree that Elliot is not a nice fellow. The "idiots" thing was understood (but slightly repetitive in some places), but otherwise gave us an idea of his general mindset. The descriptions, too, were written well, especially in the beginning. They did start to get weaker the closer to the end it got, though. Overall, neither of us caught many grammar issues, if any.

~~~

4 // ROBIN LAVERNE

Score - 10.75 [+1 First Entry] = 11.75