Nonexistent by: DragonGirl_97
Remember, these are just my opinions. Feel free to argue with or agree with any points I make.
Let's begin. The introduction is pretty strong. We get a sense of the world Keila lives in. It paces itself pretty well, and nothing really feels out of place. Though one thing I noted -- but maybe I missed it -- I wasn't exactly sure what city they were located in. But maybe I just missed it.
The overall body is well done. Nothing I saw in terms grammar, punctuation, and spacing issues. The dialogue is fine. The plot smooths quickly and easily. I suppose the only real thing I can say is maybe add more to Keila's character. Granted, she is dying for most of the story so far, so I guess it's not that big of an issue.
Honestly there's nothing really more for me to say. Great story so far, and keep it up!
Summary:
Pros:
Everything right now
Cons:
Nothing of note
If you want to see if your world falls to ruins when aliens attack, then check out Nonexistent. Maybe you can find your will to survive.
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