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Two Guys, One Marriage - A story by @loveniall04

Review:

Originality: 2/5

1,000. That's how many books I've read with a book about One Direction. Okay, maybe I'm exaggerating. But it is not very original. You could've made your own band with your own singer. The actually story is VERY PREDICTABLE. From just reading two chapters, I can see that Clare would end up with Harry. Or Clare would choose Harry and then come crawling back to JJ. I don't know but all I'm saying is that it is very predictable and like I have read it before. I will give you a two.

Grammar and Punctuation: 5/5

Your grammar was excellent! I have nothing more to say about it. I will give you a five.

Book Cover: 3/5

The cover itself was very plain and boring, but for some reason it worked! The cover suited the storyline of the book! The colours were picked well and suited it. There are only two things I didn't like or didn't get. One was that The title was there, but there was something missing. THE AUTHOR! The person who made your cover forgot to put the author (loveniall04) on the cover. The other thing is that I didn't really like the paper ripping effect. I will give you a three.

Character: 2/5

I didn't really feel the character, like I didn't feel what she was feeling. I couldn't understand her the way I should've. I suggest adding more description to the feelings of Clare. I will give you a two.

Dialogue: 4/5

The dialogue was great. There wasn't a lot of it and there wasn't too little of it. Just the perfect amount. I would've given you a five but you needed to describe the surroundings more. I will give you a four.

Plot: 2/5

It wasn't very original, like I said before. And to be honest, it didn't really feel real to me. Like the pace was to fast. Not described very well. Anyway, the plot is okay-ish. I will give you a two.

Is your story interesting?: 4/10

It's not very interesting and I don't really want to read the rest of the book. I am just being honest. I can already tell what will happen at the end of the book. I know I just read two chapters (really short chapters) but it should be better. It could be better. Just keep working at it and make more plot twists. I will give you a four.

Overall Rating: 22/40