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DragonHeart - A story by @dancingteen8

Review-

First of all, your first paragraph did not hook me in. It was boring and sort of cliche to me. Most of the stories I've read here in wattpad start of like that, no joke.

I didn't see much spelling mistakes so that's good. One big mistake that I saw you made, was your tense.

Most of your story is on present tense but some of it I saw was past. Your tense is very important but easy to make a mistake on. You could read your story a loud or give it to an editor. I guess all I'm saying is, it's very easy to fix.

Overall I think your story was good, it wasn't great but at least it wasn't bad. I think you can improve on your story way more by making it more interesting. Maybe at the end you can make it the suitcase was stolen or something by someone. I don't know, but here's what I know. FIND A WAY TO MAKE YOUR STORY MORE INTERSTING! Here is a formula to being good at writing: Interesting plot + great writing skills = more readers!

Here is your overall rating:

Rating: 5.7 / 10

Remember, this is just my opinion on your story and I can be quite harsh. You asked for my opinion and you got it. Nothing to cry over on, okay? You did really well, I hope you keep writing!