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The Light In Darkness Prologue - A story by @IggyTheTribute

Review-

I like the way you described each scene vivdly and how you painted a picture into my mind. You made me feel like I was there and like I'm the actual main character! That is something that I've been trying to do for years and you, have done it! There isn't much to critique on this story either but I just want to say I saw a few grammar mistakes.

I've read a few stories with a bad guy's P.O.V like yours but I think yours is one of THE best! You described the scenes so well and like I said before you only need to work on your grammar.

I think your story is good but I don't think it will like soar through the sky. I think you need to add more twists or maybe create more suspense. THAT would make it way better. It's really good like I said before but it could be better.

I like your plot and your imagination is insane! I like your ideas too.

Here is your rating for your prologue:

Rating: 8.3 / 10

Great job and I hope you keep writing!