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My Distraction - A Story by @Xenya_Lovies

Review-

I love the way you write. The relationship between the two sisters is just so cute and adorable. You write really well and your character traits are just starting to develop. 

I think you need to work a little bit on your grammar and punctuation. You just need to proof read your work a little and work on the basic capital letters and commas and stuff. Nothing a good editor can't fix. 

You describe your characters really well. I think you also need to work on your tense. Writing in past tense I think is harder to do than writing in present tense. But of course, this is from my personal experience. You need to make up your mind whether you want it in past or present because then your readers will get really messed up. I think an easy way to check over your work is reading it aloud and that's when you can pick up a lot of mistakes. 

Your dialogue is nice and natural which is good. I have trouble with that in my writing and you pretty much mastered it. 

Here is your rating:

Rating: 9.3 / 10

I really like your plot and your style of writing. I would highly recommend this story to my friends. Good luck with your story! (I voted!)