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Raven - A Story by @a_little_lost

Review-

I just want to start by saying that the prologue didn't really hook me in. I got kind of bored at the start but when I started to read till the end of the prologue, I actually quite like it. I liked how you described each scene and also described how she felt and what she was thinking.

Just saying, I think you should edit them before you post them. I saw a few mistakes that could be easily fixed if read over if looked by a hired editor. Just a few suggestions, maybe instead of "being right away replaced..." you could make it "being replaced right away." I know I'm not an editor or anything but I just thought maybe I should point that out. There's not much to critique in how you actually wrote it. I really liked how you just gave enough of information so that the reader would want to read on to the next chapter. Here is your rating:

Rating: 8.2 / 10

I really like your prologue and I think you would do well with your next chapters. Good luck!