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Fix You - A Story by @EllieMai

Review-

I really like how you started with a very dramatic scene. The way Mollie found out that her parents got killed was very realistic.

I culdn't find any spelling errors or grammatical errors so you did a good job on that.

I like the way you described Mollie at the start. It really helps the readers understand what they are reading. I think Mollie would be a very hard character to choose to base your story around. But it looks like you like a challenge like that.

Your tense is pretty good. I didn't get confused at all. But I think in your first chapter you should stick to present tense. If you want to do backstory stuff, do it on a seperate chapter. That's just what I think.

Here is your rating:

Rating: 8.6 / 10

Your story hooked me in right from start to finish. You did a great job describing the scenes. Good luck on your story!