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4. Alessandra Silvana Adorno

Hello there! :D

Today we're looking at Alessandra Silvana Adorno, a character submitted by @magam321. It isn't too long, but this doesn't stop us from getting a little snack like a bag of chips (or whatever you like). So lets start right in! :D

(I'll do this chronologically, so when I ask questions in the beginning, to which the answers are told later, I'll still ask them. I'm doing this as I read it the first time, as always.)

Just a note that English isn't my first language, so sorry for any mistakes c:

I'm sure you're doing great, keep going with practice! (It isn't my native language either and I'm still learning new things as well, so I'll probably make mistakes too ;P)

Fandom: Original.

It's an urban fantasy world, with vampires, witches and werewolves being the main three species. There are other ones, but these three are the only ones that are immortal (as in can't die of old age / don't age).

Ok, so by now vampires are the most common species I had to review this far, but good choices. Besides the thing with deaths (I'll probably comment on that later as well, but lets see what exactly you want to tell me about that), I've got one other thing: what do you mean by witches? Humanoid females with magic powers? Or does it include people of other gender as well? Are they human? I mean they neither age nor die of age, so they don't seem to be. Or is this just a case for book-science? ;P

The only way a witch can die permanently is if their heart is burned. Otherwise, they come back after a day or two.

I mean, I know of many gruesome ways to die, but how exactly do you burn a heart? Stab someone with a red-hot piece of iron? Or with a burning piece of wood? Or do you have to rip the heart out of the body (somehow, I mean you do have a ribcage I'm gonna assume) and burn it afterwards? Do you have to burn the entire person (like the old witch-processes in the Middle Ages... is it inspired by that? If yes, I like your work with historical details!) And why exactly is it the heart that has to be burned? I'll assume that it's something like the place where the soul is, but let's see how that'll play out. In itself, good.

Their favorite hobbies include coming back from the "dead", creating horror-y creatures they later hunt for sport or party with, or ruining people's lives.

Do they have a choice to come back from the dead? Or is it something that just lies in their nature? Because If they can't do it by choice and can't enjoy it, that goes against the rules of something being a hobby (I'll cite Wikipedia: "A hobby is considered to be a regular activity that is done for enjoyment, typically during one's leisure time.") I mean, you most certainly don't have anything to do in the afterlife, so that might be a reason, but how does it work/qualify as a hobby?
Do these beings have some sort of consciousness or soul? Do they "reincarnate"? Like, is there a limited pool of souls that (maybe) have been murdered by the ones that summon them or are they an empty husk that doesn't feel or think on their own, only guided by primal instincts?
Aw, that's mean :[

Vampires are human before turning, and even born werewolves live as humans for 18 years - witches, as a species and as individuals, were never human. They live by a different standard of ethics and with a different worldview than humans.

Turning in the sense that they have to be bitten to turn? Or that in vampires sexually reproduce and have a child, that the "vampire-genes" still have to kick in at some point?
Ok, that mainly makes sense, I think. Are werewolves able to control their wolf-form? There are both variants in folklore and pop-culture, so you can't really be wrong
How exactly different? Just being more ruthless and demeaning of others?