Chapter 11: Are You Happy?
-Added extra descriptions.
-This is not specifically for Chapter 11 but in general, I wanted to have Peacemaker act a little like an AI learning with keywords like "examine" or "observe", also there are a few more mentions of memories being foggy and how he recently felt certain emotions that he doesn't remember ever feeling.
-Peacemaker in the memory moment isn't aware of what Hell is.
-More description of the human that Winter has alongside him. It's Peacemaker's first time seeing one.
-Peacemaker in his head questions about the use of magic to get Nightwings and Icewings to not hate each other with an Empathy Spell.
-When Peacemaker starts crying for the first time in...a while and Mink comforts him, Peacemaker doesn't believe what Mink says but at the same time, it is that moment that shined a light on her in Peacemaker's mind, declaring her not a "friend" but a true friend.
Chapter 12: The Secret Assassin
-Snail is described as getting her throat slit instead of being stabbed to death.
-More details about the game, "The Floor is Shards".
-A bit of rewording.
Chapter 13: Piece by Piece
-Winter is more hesitant about revealing the Diamond Trials to someone.
-When asked about his thoughts on Mink, Peacemaker replies a lot more calmly and generally by listing his opinions about her. He leaves a few other opinions out to not give Winter the wrong idea(which kind of doesn't work and it confused Peacemaker a little).
-Peacemaker is shown a moment of a bit of cluelessness romantic/emotional wise as he took Winter's comment, "You do pay attention to her, don't you?" literary. He's confused as he thought it was an obvious trait about him and an obvious description of Mink. Darkstalker chooses to not explain it as he kind of just wants Peacemaker to forget about it.
-A bit of rewording.
Chapter 14: Hybrid's Performance(Old Name: Flirtatious Performance)
-Chapter Name Change.
-"Sometimes I wonder what's it going to be like when we're older, are we going to be still friends? Best friends? What kind of jobs are we going to have? Will we go outside the rainforest?" Clearblade listed....well that sucks to hear given what we know.
-Drytail momentarily appears right when Peacemaker and Mink are greeted by the others on their return. He rolls his eyes and walks off into the academy.
-Auklet mentions Cliff's mother with an envious undertone that Peacemaker notices.
-Instead of Peacemaker using the art of manipulating with romance, he uses the art of manipulating with friendship as he uses, though guiltily, Clearblade and Clawslasher as a reminder and uses their names to get Berrybush to apologize to Drytail.
-Peacemaker thinks of a funny idea that also has no romantic intentions which Mink misunderstands and bumps his head for it, though looking a little flustered.
-Peacemaker starts feeling annoyed with him getting hit in the head at the beginning which the others don't notice.
-A bit of rewording and scenery description.
Chapter 15: Promises
-A bit of rewording.
-A little bit of extra thoughts from Peacemaker about certain moments.
-A lot of fixes with spelling.
-Added context.
Chapter 16: Colors, Faces, and Trauma
-A little rewording and extra scenery description.
-Added dialogue.
-When Peacemaker's main friends of the winglet visit him after he spends the day resting in the Healing Center, Drytail is noted to be surprisingly present and questions Peacemaker a little.
Chapter 17: The Full Moon Festival (Old Name: Mystery Here, Chaos There)
-Chapter name change.
-Reference to the Rivine Incident. Venuswing is described to be now so distant that Peacemaker thinks of her as becoming more of a stranger than anyone familiar.
-Peacemaker still is shown to have some care for Moon as he was willing to cut her some slack for possibly overhearing his thoughts because he stood next to her.
-Peacemaker remembers a time when Qibli took him to see a performance in Queen Thorn's Stronghold in which Peacemaker smiled at the fact that a place so vacant and dry, could have so much life.
-Darkstalker called Peregrine a weird and helpful nurse.
-The issue with the unhinged Skywing's interaction and physical contact with Cliff reminded Peacemaker of a similar instance where a female Nightwing was a bit weird with his colorful wings as she was grabbing his wings and talons. Peacemaker describes that he wasn't sure if this had the same reasoning or if Peacemaker felt comfortable with it back then.
-Peacemaker quickly hands Auklet the necklace he took from Sunset.
-A bit of rewording and added descriptions.
Chapter 18: Discussion with Dusky Till Dusk
-Peacemaker noticed a little more about who's with who as sometimes Drytail is described to be with Venuswing in the festival but then he doesn't appear and Venuswing is with Berrybush. I wanted to add this to have a bit of paranoia as other dragons are not present and Peacemaker isn't sure where they are.
-Foreshadowing to the Ravine Incident.
-A bit of rewording and added descriptions.
Chapter 19: Confessions
-Mentions of Peacemaker's memory being impacted a bit.
-Clawslasher and Berrybush helped "borrow" Qibli's earring according to Clearblade.
-"It's just an earring, right? What harm can an earring do?" Peacemaker argued with himself.
...I agree, what harm can a single earring do?
-A bit of an explanation of what's going on with Venuswing, Drytail, and Sludgesnout while Peacemaker was absent.
-A bit of rewording and added scenery descriptions.
Chapter 20: Aftermath of a Second Murder
-A bit of rewording and added descriptions.
-A couple of small fixes.
-Added starting visual details about the queens in their looks.
-Added small bits of dialogue.
-According to Peacemaker, the queens don't look bothered about Kinkajou's absence in the meeting even though Moonwatcher and Qibli are there. It's kind of because Glory isn't there and the queens view Kinkajou either as an add-on or someone insignificant which Peacemaker finds ironic. Turtle also wasn't there which made sense to Peacemaker.
-Surprisingly not many fixes.
I feel like at this point I want to focus less on fixing and editing the chapters as they're getting more recent and fewer fixes will probably be required instead I'll focus more on finally writing a new chapter for PAIS. I am also going to soon do Character Facts for Winter, Moonwatcher, and Silentstar.
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Strawberries and Darkness
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