Author Games: A Knight's Valor

Task Three: Scores

BONUSES

First Hand In: Group Six, for handing in before the original deadline had passed. [+1]

Second Hand In: Group Four [+.5]

A Knight's Ransom: Eleos Eiríni [+2 to individual score]

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GROUP ONE: Rhaegar, John Tommson, Taran Gassett

NOTES

This wasn't a bad entry, but there were quite a few noticeable mistakes and missing words. Also, it was VERY heavily situated with Rhaegar and that was NOT the task. The task was for it to be about them trying to get up there and simply put there was too much other things going on. It wasn't a wise move to further backstory for the individual on this task.

SCORE: 12.3

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GROUP TWO: Cynesige Tolbert, Trustin Mee, Colette Bennett

NOTES

This entry was fairly well written, however, it felt a bit rushed mid-way through and the beginning was a bit choppy. It was hard to tell who wrote what, but there were some grammatical/spelling mistakes and awkward writing that caught our eye. The only suggestion we have is to take more time to edit and make everything flow as smoothly as possible.

SCORE: 12

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GROUP THREE: Vere Lennox, Mavary Valls, Eleos Eiríni

NOTES

You three never fail to impress. The writing was good, the banter was funny, and even though it was short it felt complete. However, we would like to see a bit more distinction between the POV's, at times it became a little muddy and we had to go back and re-read a few sentences. Still, the writing was good with very few mistakes that we could pick up.

SCORE: 13.9

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GROUP FOUR: Killian Henry, Fennett Abernathy, Ren Lancaster

NOTES

There were few things we didn't like and even so they were incredibly slight. There was maybe one or two spots here that I think could've been written better, and some fluff words that could've been removed, but all in all this just WORKED. Everyone did SO well together. It was very difficult to tell who wrote what and that was what we were looking for. You guys did wonderful together and we hope to see more of this quality from you three.

SCORE: 13.7 [+.5] = 14.2

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GROUP FIVE: Finn Silverstein, Edmund, Willow Alden

NOTES

Overall, the task was handled very nicely. But parts of the writing were very awkward, as well as some of the dialogue. There were grammatical errors and spelling issues scattered throughout, but nothing a fine-toothed edit wouldn't catch.

SCORE: 10.2

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GROUP SIX: Momo Seafare, Alexis Rovel, Oak Agra Kaci

NOTES

This entry was pretty good, and we were very pleased to read it. Your writing styles blended fairly well and we could see the time you three put into your writing. There were parts where a few of our judges though it dragged on, but overall you three did a great job. We did notice that a LOT of thoughts were in past tense, which didn't make it feel as realistic as it could have been and brought us out of the entry. But, there were very few grammatical errors. Keep up the good work!

SCORE: 12.5 [+1] = 13.5

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GROUP SEVEN: Aloïsa Beaumarchais, Keiko Kenemoto, Zenith Nadir

NOTES

This was a good example of three people working well together! While we like how you kept to the letter idea, it might not have been a good idea for a group task as it seemed to distract from the entry. Still, you three managed to put a good amount of each character into this. It feels a bit short, however, and almost lacking in the key instances of the challenge. We were a little disappointed that your dinosaur turned out to be nothing more than a lizard, but we didn't take off points for that. The writing, however, was very good and we didn't see too many mistakes.

SCORE: 12.6