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Username: dagirlwholovedyou

Book title: The F*cked up Story of Ours

Genre: Fantasy

Focus: Plot, characters, writing style.

Book cover:

The image suits your story well. It's whimsical and dark at the same time and very fitting for the mood. Great job with choosing the correct one.

But there are points to improve. The book title is merges too much with the background. There isn't enough contrast. There is too many font changes, I suggest maybe having two different fonts at the most. The size needs to be a bit uniform as well there is just too much variation and not enough contrast.

How you can make this better is by choosing two fonts at the most.

As for the spatial awareness, the title needs to be placed better. And you have the perfect place in the image. Maybe you could move the author name to the top and just push the title down to the darker area at the bottom of the image. This would bring about a good contrast.

Blurb:

You only have two lines. It's a great hook. They are well chosen and would definitely entice the readers to want to know more. My suggestion would be to increase the length. As of now the blurb doesn't really offer any insight into the story.

Plot: (focus)

As far as the premise goes, I'm not really sure because you haven't included any in the blurb. So I went into the story totally blind. The impression the blurb left, was that it was a romance. But the initial chapters hardly had any romance. I'm sure it's mentioned later but the initial chapters are all action packed. I mention this because, the impression that the blurb leaves on your readers is very important.

When they come expecting a romance, it's better to deliver a romance right away. I don't mean start off with them kissing, what I mean is, the set up should point that way.

Your story, atleast the first five chapters deal heavily with action. Don't get me wrong, I loved the action. Being someone who isn't all that into romance in the first place, it was a pleasant surprise. But that might not be the case for everyone.

So what I'm trying to say is, make sure your blurb reflects your story accurately. Don't let it be a case of false advertisement.

Now getting to the main aspects like storyline, I loved it. LOVED it. It was fast paced, it was intriguing and it kept me thoroughly entertained. GREAT JOB! It reads like a fantasy action and I'm all here for it.

I just think you could mention a bit more about what Astra actually is. She clearly isn't human but what is she exactly?

I loved the plot point about the forbidden sword and the fact that it is the only thing that can harm her.

I think the entire thing with the maze was very well executed. And cool detail about the scythe! I love them! I just picture her smashing a mirror with one and wow, that was badass! Way to go!

The pacing seems fine but could do with a little more set up. I'll mention it more in writing style (creative)

The last point I want to talk about is originality of plot. I think the idea is very original. I didn't see any cliches till what I read. GREAT JOB!

Writing style: (creative) (focus)

Overall I like your writing style. It's pretty immersive. I just think you include more scene settings.