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Abeeha's review

Review by Abeeha

Title: Highway of Lights
Author: softyhartz
Reviewer: @Abeeha_32

Cover + Title:

Honestly though, I fell in love with your cover the moment I saw it. It's so professional and cute, especially with the animated hint. It perfectly sets a merry journey-like atmosphere. The fonts used and the spacing are so nicely done, they're drool-worthy. The author's name is also clear and easy to read and does not merge with the background tint. There is a line below the author's name which I couldn't read. If it is something like a tagline/subtitle for your story, I suggest you to enlarge it. Apart from that, you can also shift the Author's name to the bottom. This is a trivial opinion but since there is nothing at the bottom, it can make the book cover look a bit flat. That's just my opinion though, you can stick to the way you want. With this, I conclude by saying that the cover is very well thought of. Good job mate!

Coming to the title here, I feel it's so captivating. HIGHWAY OF LIGHTS. It's short and sweet and it gives off a vibe which is weirdly intriguing. It's a bit vague but that only adds to the curiosity of your readers so I'm pretty much fine with that. The word 'lights' is strong and deep (in this context) and greatly enhances your novel, giving off an inviting ambience.

Blurb:

The blurb is short and to the point. It's so interesting, smooth and engaging, I bet it can hook any reader (including me, haha).
There are some things I felt, which I thought I should point out.

*In which Riley Ran's flight gets cancelled...
The way you have started it looks a bit haphazard (though I know that it's more related to style than grammar) I suggest you to rephrase it. I don't encourage starting it in stereotypical, cliché ways but then again, you can use your imagination for writing something out of the blue and nice, which also sounds grammatically structured.

With only thirty-two hours, they drive pass highways and highways.
Correction: With only thirty-two hours, they drive 'past' highways and highways.

Consider replacing the word 'pass' with 'past.'

The rhetoric question at the end is clever and mysteriously portrayed. I found hard to resist my urge to explore your book.

Just try to be clear with the implied meaning of the context and do some corrections and the blurb will be good to go. The blurb is extremely short but I nonetheless like it because in your case, it's nicely executed. There wasn't even one point when I felt that the blurb became clumsy or redundant.

Grammar + Writing Style:

Most of your writing is well done with grammar and vocabulary. There were a few things I'd however like to point out:

Chapter-1

Even though talking to my mom over text messages make me feel...

Correction: Even though talking to my mom over text messages 'makes' me feel...

The scene when she gets the slip for the number 246 and it's 190 going on, was a bit rushed. What I felt is that you can maybe make Riley do something which is actually time-consuming so that it seems realistic.

I didn't hear a single respect in your attitude
Correction: I didn't hear a single ounce of respect in your attitude.

You can add the word 'ounce' to make it more grammatically structured but it will be better if you can rephrase it like:
"How can you be so disrespectful? " Or something else like this which fits.

His eyes so brown as to almost be black

Correction: His eyes so brown, that they almost appear black.