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Abeeha's express review

    Express Review by Abeeha

Title: Relationship for Convenience 

Author: freckled_nicky

Reviewer: Abeeha

Cover+Title:

The cover is simple and the picture chosen looks a bit flat. It does not really express the concept of your book because of the monochromatic fonts and picture. Taking your genre in consideration, the Internet has an abundance of better pictures which you can choose. White and black fonts can be an extremely brilliant idea, if used in the right way. I suggest you to maybe chose a picture which is colourful and bright so as to make it less boring and more attractive. I know how hard finding the perfect cover for your book can be, but sadly, books are judged here by their covers because that’s the only way you can hook potential readers.

Lastly, enlarge the Author’s name because you have worked hard with the book and YOU MATTER!

Coming to the title here, I believe it’s okay but could definitely have been better. The title chosen perfectly co-relates with the content but it’s a bit formal. A title should be catchy and crispy- more like ‘Relationship with Benefits’ or anything like that. Just a little editing here and you’ll be good to go!

Blurb:

The blurb is really perfectly written. I absolutely love how you’ve actually summarised the concept in just a few lines. I however feel that it’s executed in an absurd manner. There are a few things, which I guess you can re-edit to make it absolutely flawless.

The first paragraph of the blurb:

Anna was shocked...relationship was one-sided.

It comes off as a bit confusing and too rushed with some errors like “boyfriend OF four months.” The word ‘of’ can be replaced with ‘for’ instead. This makes it grammatically correct.

“So I’m just your mistress this thing”

Correction: “So, I’m just your mistress. Right?”

After ‘so’, putting a comma (,) would make it flow around nicely.

2). I didn’t get the meaning of the use of ‘this thing’ You could either write it in the way I’ve mentioned or rephrase it according to your convenience. 

I believe you can do a quick re-write of your blurb, using less heavy phrases and writing it in a rather precise manner, so as to make your writing user-friendly.

Grammar + Writing Style:

I can say for one thing that the grammatical errors are less and I totally appreciate that. It’s written in a simple yet intriguing format, encouraging readers to stick to your book. There are some places where you have used philosophy which I found really beautiful. The constant thoughts Anna has, are portrayed impeccably in a poetic way!

*There were some issues with punctuation, especially comma(s). Always remember that a comma (,) determines a pause. Thus, you have to use it frequently and at the right places.

*There was a lack of description in many places. I believe you can use your describing power wherever you can, it really helps to enhance your work. You can add minor details describing what Anna feels at the moment. Try being as professional with your descriptions as you can, it’ll bring out the author in you.

*You have used basic and simple words and the writing style is precise. Some reviewers make it a point of criticism (simple vocabulary) but, I believe it’s good. Using very heavy words sometimes makes the text complex and confusing but your writing is reader-friendly which I found a total thumbs-up! Good work mate.

*There were some instances where I noticed that you have started dialogues with a small initial letter. I feel it will be more grammatically structured, if you can start dialogues with capital letters instead.

Characters:

Your protagonist (Anna) is a very strong and well-composed character. I really like her and she is so inspiring! I loved the fact that she didn’t act desperate, she calmly handled the situation like a true queen. Her thoughts are illustrated in the perfect manner and though she misses Alex terribly, she never took a wrong step. The second she was made aware of being pregnant, she decided to raise the baby rather than opting for an abortion. Very effective!

Nicole’s character as a best friend is also beautifully penned. She left no stone unturned to pull Anna out of the traumatic situation. As a best friend, her character is super-supportive and I absolutely loved every bit of it. Well done!

Alex. The plight of a man struggling with marriage issues, how he was afraid to disclose anything to Anna fearing a negative response, was perfectly depicted. His dialogues (I must say) are very realistic. They are not over-dramatic and to the point.

Plot : 

Lovely plot. The ideas are very well thought of and are pretty cool. If it is written with a little more efficiency, the plot will turn out to be amazing! I really loved the idea of the introduction of a trip which will help in lightening Anna’s mood. There were very few dull moments and I absolutely adore how you jumped right into the intriguing element of the story right from the first chapter, rather than exaggerating it. Well-executed!

Overall Enjoyment:

Your book is full of emotions and heartwarming instances. I really enjoyed reading it. These were some of the suggestions I have. Try resolving the problems and the book will be good to go. I hope you find this review helpful. Lots of luck for your writing.

Until next time!❤️