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Kola's review

Death in the Hotel

Birdsongfuzz

Focus: The Beginning chapter – family dining scene. I have stressed every subcategory to incorporate suggestions for this section.

Book Cover

Perfect description and imagery for your book. Absolutely astounded by the choice. It sets the tone for a thriller/horror series. The lighting within the image, the colour theme, the contrasting details and the angle chosen is wondrous. It gave me the exact information I was looking for as soon as I read the title. Amazing job, love!!

I'm usually not a fan of Serif font, but again, you nailed it too! It fits perfectly with the classical architecture context of the building. The font and the architectural style bring the cover together, there is a complete flow of information and ah, I love all of it. My only concern is the alignment of the "in the" with the two main words. I would suggest placing the "In the" at the starting of "Hotel" (specifically the H). That is literally my only comment.

A suggestion, I don't know if it would add more effect to the cover, but it is worth the try. Why don't you test out two different fonts? One for "Death" and "Hotel" and a cursive font for "in the". Or try different combinations? Completely up to you. I think it looks great!

I love that you have used your own name. I love the positioning. I could go on and on! Kudos to you (or whoever designed it)! I absolutely love the banners too!

Blurb

I love the intrigue that you have tried to accomplish within the summary. There's a lot of unanswered questions that drives the plot/storyline making me want to continue into the book.

The division of the two summaries is concerning. I got confused seeing two different blurbs that are saying the same thing. I believe that you should choose one because in the end the information that each one gives out is the same, however, the tone differs. I love the intrigue that you are trying to accomplish in the first one, so I believe that is something more informative and detailed to work with.

"Two innocent girls with a lively present (full stop) one sinister hotel with a dark past."
This is a great line to start off with. I love everything about the plot beginning from the starting just like your story does. Great execution on your part!

The next line does not translate. There's a lack of cohesiveness between the choice of vocabulary and the sentence structure which I have also noticed in the book. I think when you place a word into the sentence structure, you need to make sure that the definition of the word (and the form of the word: verb, adjective or adverb tense) is right. Otherwise, it leaves the reader a little confused. Usually, I try to do this with my writing as well. Being inclusive of complex words is a great task to go forward with, but I definitely recommend to re-read and understanding the impact that it gives. I usually perform this task with a fresh mind. It allows you to take a whole new perspective of the sentence.

Example: "They crossed each other's paths because of the maliceful doings of the cruel fate!"
In this case, I understand the point you are trying to make completely. You want to state that their friendship goes through tests due to the situation that they are in. However, the sentence structure makes it bulky and run-on. As I have read some chapters, this bit did also not translate since they were already friends?

My suggestion: "Their friendship is put to the test when they enter the Classio."
Personally, I usually like blurbs to be short and crisp directly leading to the intriguing plot with chunks of the storyline missing. I think it is important to make sure that each sentence in the blurb is thoroughly analysed to understand if there is a different point being made in each. Each sentence needs to be unique with fresh information to attract the interest of the reader. Once you overwrite one scenario, especially for a blurb, I think it becomes run-on. Of course, this is a personal opinion because I have seen many different blurbs working in different formats.