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Review for Jade_S4M
Review by Sapphydean
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Author: @Jade_S4M
Reviewer: Sapphydean
Cover:
How do I say this... The cover is, bad. I'm sorry if I offend anyone, I really do but I can barely see your name at the bottom. The quality of the picture and/or cover seems to be very low and the font isn't that good. In short, it's not attractive... at all. What I do like about it is the balance between warm and cool tones. I do realize that there are no neutral tones here but we can live without it. But there's a good balance between the blue hues and the orange at the background.Title:
Alright, I have a confession to make. I'm a sucker for sweet titles XD. And this one definitely checks on my box. I love the simplicity of it and the sweetness of the whole thing (PS: I love sweet titles, but I hate cheesy things, it makes me cringe like no other, so good for you for not doing that.)Description:
The blurb of your story is pretty good. It keeps the reader on their toes and wanting for more and I love the extract from the prologue as well. What I would suggest however, is to probably make it a tad bit longer. I was curious when I read the blurb but it's not that descriptive in order to make me want to read it right away. So, I think if you give more information it'll be better :).Grammar:
Okay, so, uh. Your grammar isn't the best. There are a couple of spelling mistakes and places that kind of awaken my Grammar Nazi self. I'd suggest you have someone to go through and edit it. That's really all I have to say for this :).Writing Style:
I like your writing style. It's a first person point of view so I have a glimpse more to the protagonist's feelings but half the time I wished I know what is happening on the other side. (although I did read the extra, so yes.) but other side than that I found nothing wrong with it. It was perfectly my taste, not overly complicated words but just formal enough. It definitely lags behind in some places but mostly the pace is perfect.Characters:
The character development is interesting. I like how Mirae learnt to accept Chanyeol and how Sehun is definitely on my list of least favourite characters. (I don't care if he changed. I still don't like him -_-). I like the characters' individual traits just fine so I think you did a great job here.Plot:
I do like the plot. The hate was more one-sided but Chanyeol had it coming. He was a jerk at the beginning of the year. But I do like the enemies-to-lovers storyline. It is also set on a boarding school which I think is a perfect type of setting for those kind of stories since they have to tolerate each other more than a day school. So great setting choice.Overall Experience:
I think it is a good book. Does it need major edits? Definitely. But was is it a great book? Of course! i do like that you didn't make the EXO characters extremely themselves in real life or I wouldn't understand a thing. But it's a great story nonetheless.
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