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Cover I like the picture for the cover. It definitely suits the "goth" theme. However, the texts can be fixed. Maybe something a bit bolder would do it some justice. However, I love the fact that it's not over the top and full with a lot of random details that hurts the eye. So that's definitely a plus. All in all, it's not a bad cover (since I suck at digital design so it's definitely better than anything I can come up with).
Title The title is very interesting. I remembered it quickly, which is a good thing when it comes to title naming. It's short, simple and straight to the point. As far as titles go, it's a really good title. Not too long (which isn't like mine btw, which has six words, which I regret XD).
Description The title is intriguing. However, when I started reading the book, I was confused. Who is the character (whom I think is Charlie) talking about? Ash or Asher? So I would appreciate it if you wrote a name or something. But overall, it's a good choice for a description. A passage from the story, it keeps people interested:). Cuz at first, when I started reading it. The main main is Ash and Asher, Jett and Charlie is just like second main. You get what I mean? But then, it follows Asher and Charlie more.
Grammar Your grammar is good, although I feel some paragraphs are too long. I would just like to say (or type, but details) that long paragraphs can be a problem. When paragraphs gets too long, people tend to jump to the last sentence and not bother reading the sentences in between. So I would suggest you to keep it short and cutting it off in places. However, some sentences are cut-off as well as you make a new paragraph. I don't know if this is an accidental thing, but I would just like to point it out. But other side than these two details, nothing is wrong and your grammar is hella good.
Writing Style Your writing style is definitely out there. It's leaning wayyy closer to informal. However, it's not too informal that it seems a) childish or b) cringy. (thank the heavens, I do NOT do cringy stories). However, you jump from one perspective to the other so suddenly like a snap of your finger. I think it would be better if you put a border or something like that to signify that the perspective is different. From example, from Ash to Jett to Charlie in the beginning kind of mess with my head a lil' bit. It would be good if you put a banner or just some random three dots there. But otherside that that, I love your writing style.
Characters Your characters are definitely interesting with their own crazy personality XD. My favorite so far will definitely be Charlie. She just breaks all stereotypes with no qualms which is very relatable in my life. Asher is definitely one of a kind. He's wayyy more trusting than his brother and seems to be more playful. However, he has a dark side as well. He's a bit more of a character that opens easily and protects people he cares about (in the cases of Charlie and Ash). Ash is definitely a hard-trusting figure and is an interesting character. He's very over-protective to people that he cares about but can be really rude to people he doesn't know. Which I guess can be both a good and a bad trait. Jett is definitely the goofy type. He can be a bit clumsy at times, which is very relatable to people (*cough* me *cough*). He's the more playful type of the group which is obvious, but he's very loyal and wants to protect the people he cares about as well (stares pointedly at Ash). I'm interested to see what havoc he, Charlie, Ash and Asher would bring with all their personalities combined.
Plot The plot is interesting to say the least. I like the whole "breaking-all-stereotypes-cuz-why-not" theme. It teaches us independence and sometimes, rebel is needed. (Although don't steal people. Just don't, unless you wanna go to juvie like Ash and Asher). I will definitely keep on reading it until it's done :).
Overall Experience I'm in LOVE with the book. Continue it pleaseee. I love the whole concept of it and if The Wildcards exist in real life, I'd join it in the blink of an eye. I can definitely relate to some concept of the story (no, I never went to juvie, nor do I wanna. But I'm definitely a rebel in more ways than one. Although I've nearly never get caught). I really suggest people to read it (if you're either 18 years old and above or a minor that is comfortable with these stuff *snickers*). It's a really good book!!!
