BTS (Maknae line X Reader) FF Love Quandrangle by dxrk-slxyer
1.9K reads, 423 votes, 28 chapters at time of review 1/4/21
Jungkook: You will choose me right, Y/N?
Taehyung: No Y/N, please give me a chance to prove my love for you and the fact that I love you more than Jungkook and Jimin.
Jimin: Y/N think about all the moments we have spent together, was that all a waste?
You: Guys I n-need t-time to d-decide.......please u-understand * You said with tears streaming down your face.*
It is not easy to love three guys at the same time.
In fact, it is harder when the guys insist on choosing one out of the three of them.
Will Kim Y/N be able to solve this roller coaster or will her life be like a series of tangled wires......
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I think your cover is attractive and goes with the theme of your book. My only problem is that you named the book something else "BTS (Maknae line X Reader) FF Love Quadrangle," this could be on the cover or part of the description but not the name of the book. I would change it to simply, "Love Quadrangle."
I won't judge your book badly on the fact that it's an X Reader or Y/N book, but I have to add that I dislike this point of view and I know that it deters some readers from even starting your book. Of course, it's up to you. I don't understand the appeal. Just give the character a name.
The synopsis is not bad as it will appeal to a person looking for this kind of story. You cut right to the chase that the mc has to choose which one to date.
There are too many books that start with an alarm ringing and a person getting ready for the day. To be honest it is boring. It is better to start your book jumping right into the action such as her arriving at the job and being surprised at seeing her friend.
Try to write more about what the characters are thinking and feeling instead of what they are wearing. I see that you took the time to add pictures that go with the story and show the character's emotions. I really enjoyed that.
The conversations were good at showing the character's personalities but the tone seems too young and playful for CEO's. It's also very unlikely that a 20-year-old would be a CEO.
The storyline is okay but I found nothing remarkable that would make me remember the story. Your writing style reads more like a screenplay than a book because it is mostly dialogue. I found too many time skips that interrupted the flow. When it is a different day, event or other characters interacting, you should consider making it a new chapter.
I was able to understand everything but I think a more descriptive writing style would make the story better. When showing a different pov, try not to repeat what just happened so it won't be boring. As a wish-fulfillment fantasy with a bit of angst, it is quite an entertaining book that will appeal to maknae line lovers. Make sure you show emotions in the future chapters to capture your readers and continue with your cliff hanger chapter endings. Well done!
I hope this review helps.
