COVER: 5/5 The cover has a dark-mysterious vibe. The font and size are attractive and will capture readers' attention.
DESCRIPTION: 8/10 The description is short but attention-grabbing. I prefer the one in the forward better. A forward is written to recommend a book. It is done by someone other than the author. You should change it to "Introduction." The prologue is excellent
PLOT: 20/30 I like the quotes you put in the story. They really go with the feel of the plot.
To be honest, I don't understand how the title Blood Trial goes with the story. Does it mean V was tested by blood? The flashbacks are kind of confusing too. I don't understand why V and Yujin would be so rude to each other when nothing has happened between them. Maybe it is a cultural thing. I don't understand why V is so angry all the time or why he becomes violent. I know you are trying to make it a mystery but you have to give the reader a reasonable explanation.
DIALOGUE: 8/10 The dialogue is not bad and it goes with the characters. Make sure you make it clear who is talking.
DICTION: 7/10 The book needs some editing because you sometimes skip words in a sentence. If you want me to point them out let me know.
Also, you sometimes use some phrases that sound strange to me. They just need to be reworded such as: That's what friends called right? I think sb: That's what friends are for. Right?
Don't take this critique badly, you have a descriptive voice that is unique and colorful. Unfortunately, I can tell that English is not your main language. You need an editor to check your story and fix the tense problems.
GRAMMAR: 6/10 Many times the tenses of verbs don't match in a sentence and sometimes the verb is completely missing. This is the biggest problem.
AESTHETIC: 10/10 The aesthetic of this book is a beauty to behold. It is a great example for other writers, including myself, on how to make a book more appealing. Even the extra spacing between paragraphs looks appealing because it is consistent.
ORIGINALITY AND APPEAL: 6/10
I love mystery stories so I enjoyed trying to figure this one out. The last chapter was the most interesting one when things start to get good. You introduce the Ice character adding to the mystery. I hope the climax of the story is worth the wait. Good luck with your story.
74/100
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PS: You've put hard work into your editing and it shows. Great job!
