What Not to Do With your Stories + Other Randomness

1D Fan Fictions

"Beep!"

My eyes fluttered open to the sound of my alarm clock. 

Darn it! I was late to work! 

I quickly rushed into the bathroom and looked at myself in the mirror.

I have Sparkly green orbs and golden locks cascade down my back. 

Eeew! I'm such an ugly person.

1. Whose eyes flutter open?

2. NEVER start your story with the M/C waking up to an alarm. 

3. Nobody wakes up looking Flawless (Except of course, Beyoncé- and even then...)

4. Again with the orbs!

5. Why not brown eyes or better yet? Normal blue/green/brown/hazel/whatever eyes.

I quickly put my golden locks into a messy bun and put on my over-sized sweatshirt. 

1. Messy buns aren't the only hairstyle for a girl. 

2. Over-sized Sweaters are overused in wp books.

I hopped into my car and sped over to Starbucks.

Just in Time! I looked behind me to see these 5 handsome guys looking at me. I felt the heat rise up my cheeks. 

Hello! I'm Harry Styles, this is Zayn Malik, that one over there is Louis Tomlinson and that other guy is Liam Payne and the other one is Niall Horan.

1. I was under the impression you lived in America, so the chances of finding 1D at the Starbucks you work at is NEXT TO IMPOSSIBLE! 

2. If you "Sped"over to Starbucks, wouldn't you have gotten caught? I mean there's bound to be a police officer somewhere...

3. Starbucks is the only place a girl can ever work at. NOT! She could work at an animal shelter or something, or go to SCHOOL!

4. Grammar and Punctuation. I beg you, please, please, check your grammar and spelling.  

I looked at Harry Style's shaggy curls and beautiful orbs.

"Are you famous?"

1. orbs... if you mention that word one more time I will not hesitate to do something horrible. 

2. Excuse Moi? Where have you been this whole time? Under a rock? It sure sounds like it! At least the name Harry Styles should ring a bell somewhere in that head of yours. 

TO BE CONTINUED LATER...