Angus Gaius Julius "Daddy TK" Ecrivain was found dead this morning, rolled in paper, partially burnt and dripping with a thick syrup of nicotine resin. The cause? A cigarette smoked him. Police are still searching for the suspect, who they believe to be a member of the Camel brand, and they say the cigarette is armed with a butane torch and should be considered by the public to be extremely dangerous. If you see it, do not approach and most certainly do not smoke.
Naturally, AngusEcrivain is unable to continue competing in SmackDown: MadMike's Revenge.
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Results time:
Prompts: SteamPunk + First Contact, September 11th World Trade Center Attack
Did not submit, dropped out of SD:MMR
Total score - 0/15
Prompts: SamuraiPunk + Post-Apocalyptic, Jack the Ripper
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
Took all the prompts and made them feel part of a living, breathing world. Can't ask for anything more.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 3/5
Found a couple missing end quotes ( 'Jack the ripper, "But I... the wolf), an instance where a title wasn't capitalized, a missing hyphen ("hip deep"), and what looks to be a typo ("make them come to face to face").
3. Story Enjoyability - 5/5
I loved all the little details and the action was to my liking. The song prompt gave me a laugh.
Total score - 13/15
Prompts: SteamPunk + First Contact, Bombing of Nagasaki
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
Excellent usage of the prompts. I appreciated all the SteamPunk-y details.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 3/5
Some missing hyphens ("top of the range" should be "top-of-the-range"), a missing comma, a word that shouldn't be capitalized, some misplaced commas.
3. Story Enjoyability - 4/5
Loved the twist with the "aliens." I would've liked to have seen them a bit more.
Total score - 12/15
Prompts: SamuraiPunk + Post-Apocalyptic, Adolf Hitler
1. Prompt Adherence - 5/5
Prompts were used perfectly.
2. Spelling, Grammar and Punctuation - 3/5
Found a typo—"your always were one for the ladies." Missing hyphen—"blood streaked visor." Missing comma—"They worked my friend." When breaking up a piece of dialogue with an action, you should do it like this: "As a friend of mine once said"—he raised the blade above his head as he charged—"BONSAI!"
3. Story Enjoyability - 4/5
I would've liked more detail, more world-building. I was initially gonna knock another point off for an abrupt ending, but you made me laugh with President Miller's dialogue, so we'll just go with the first bit.
Total score - 12/15
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With AngusEcrivain's tragic death, no one else will be eliminated from SmackDown: MadMike's Revenge.
AngusEcrivain, I personally loved reading your expletive-laden stories, particularly if they contained your brand of dirty-minded humour. So it's a real shame you've left us. Hope you enjoyed finally getting a chance to participate in another SmackDown! May this not be the last.
The rest of you—got nothin' for ya except this list containing the names of those celebrities who will next be accused of rape, sexual harassment and sexual assault. The list is long, and some of these people have been dead for decades.
Head back to camp and get rocking on your next challenge. Round 7 is up and waiting for you.
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