Emberstar
Okay
27 moons
A bit young, but it's okay
Male
:D
Leader
:D
Rockclan
:DDD
Brown almost black and orange ears , paws , tip of tail and chest are orange and has black stripes and sharp orange eyes
Amazing
Serious, funny , smart , nice , quiet , bad tempered , deep down is insane and dark
ooOOOOOOOooOOo
Emberpaw had a mentor named rubblefoot and one time in training rubblefoot tried to kîll emberpaw because emberpaw was bad at training. But emberpaw hid in a bush and rubblefoot never found him so then emberpaw went back to rockclan and rubblefoot was exiled when starshine his mom saw rubblefoot try to kîll him. Emberpaw became a warrior named emberstrike and got his own apprentice named flamepaw. Flamepaw was a good cat but was soon kîlled by a stromclan cat darkclaw. Emberstrike became unstable that everything and himself would be kîlled, but when he was soon made deputy and forgot about his insecurity. When shadowstar dîed he was become emberstar and was the best leader the forest ever
It doesn't tell the part HOW he was the best leader ever, and that just sounds weird (NOT MENT TO BE OFFENDING). You'll never know the future, either
Mate is splashfur and kits are flamekit after flamepaw , leafkit , and gingerkit
Nice! I can't wait to know their warrior names!
OVERALL, I GIVER EMBERSTAR A 7/10. You need to tell how come he was a good leader, and saying that he was best leader of all time when you don't even know what will happen in the future. It's kind of annoying to a few people, but others are fine. I love that Flamekit is named after Flamepaw, and the backstory was wonderful. And the way you told the pelt and personality, made me actually see him.
