Name: leafshine
Great! Leaf- is underused and -shine is rarely used. 10/10
Age: 27 moons
:D 10/10
Gender: she cat
Great 10/10
Rank: warrior
10/10
Clan : hazelclan
Seen this before too many times. I suggest you change it to something like TwigClan or BrownClan or TreeClan but you can still keep it. 7/10
Appearence: leafshine is a Brown tabby she cat with short Brown tabby fur. She's got bright leaf green eyes and a scar over her left eye.
BEE careful of what you type...
Nice scar! 10/10
Personality: leafshine is a stubborn and energetic she cat whom listens to her impulses rather then thinking before she Do something. She is quite Caring and protective about the cats she cares about.
Great! It's balanced out. Just... the stubborn and Caring is REALLY REALLY overused to DEATH! 8/10
Backstory: leafshine at a Young age joined hazelclan One day unexpectedly after she had accedentaly Accidentally walked in on their terretory territory. The she cat Was mentored by a cat known as palegaze a pale cream tom with pale amber eyes. She soon became friends with a cat now known as flarewhisker Seen too many times and another known as stormbird. Everything went relativly relatively fine till One day One of the bordering clans attacked. As she had chased of an apprintence Apprentice she saw a cat that Was attacking the leader. Acting on her impulses rather then thinking things trough Through. She lunged herself at the Brown tom who had the leader pinned down. The tom Was THAT tackled of Watch what you type... the leader and hissed at her. As she Was about to fight him her leader told her to stand back and let her take care of the other leader. The rival clan soon retreated and the clan celebrated. Another few moons after she recived received her warrior name she found prey that reeked of the scent of the same clan that had attacked them all those moons Ago on their side of the border. Hurrying If to find her deputy to report her findings. She showed the deputy the prey and he soon took Care of It saying that It would probrobly probably be brought up at the next gathering. As the next gathering came she meet a tom called duststripe. They chatted till the gathering began and she bid Farwell Farewell as she had something to do. As It Was her clans turn to speek Speak her leader acused accused their rival clan of prey stealing. When the leader told her he Wanted proof leafshine draged Dragged the prey that Was scented with the rivals clan scent to the middle of the gathering clearing. Soon an argument uppstod No clue what that is betwen between the leaders and the gathering ended in the moon being covered. As they were walking back to the camp after the gathering flarewhisker pointed out How alike she looked to the rivals clan leader. She just laughed It of saying It Was a coincidence. But in reallity Reality she Was lying straight up his face. For as long As leafshine could remember she had lied to Everyone in the clan about her having amnesia. When in reallity she dident Didn't. As a kit she Was Born in to the rivaling clans leader and his mate. She had a litter mate known as duststripe. Feeling like she dident belong in the clan at all after she had been out on a Walk in the clans terretory with her father at three moons she later at four and a half moons snuck away from the clan and later joined hazelclan. She Knows that the truth about her Origin Will most likely come out One day but untill Until then Its her secret.
So many grammar mistakes D:
Flarewhisker has been seen TOO many times, and besides that, it's cool :) 9/10
Mate: a hansome tom known as brokenshadow (later on)/ crush: none/ kits: marshbreeze swiftstrike and pebbleleap (later on as well)
Mkay 10/10
OVERALL> 84/100
