Name: Wolfscar
This is okay. 10/10
Age: 20 moons
Yaya 10/10
Gender: tom
YUS 10/10
Rank: leader, but poor at it
Ahm, Leader? Where is the -star? AND WHY IS HE SO YOUNG? BLARRRGHHH 5/10
Clan: Used to be Windclan, but broke from it to form Moonclan.
Again, same problem as Bloodpaw. 5/10
Appearance: shiny gray cat who's fur shines in moonlight.
Short. I like gray cats. WHERE IS THE EYE COLOR? FUR LENGTH? wow lol. And another thing, I would rather if there would be scars, or a white spine, or long ear tufts, or something different, because that's what makes a great appearance. And saying the Breed. 5/10
Personality: caring, sensitive, weak in battle, but strong when it comes to emotion. Caring but rarely friendly.
Again. CARING. AT THE BEGINNING. NO. Weak in battle is great, and with emotion makes him stronger. EVEN BETTER! :D But this part... "Caring but rarely friendly" YOU ALREADY SAID CARING! Watch what you type, children. Add more good traits! 5/10
Backstory: At 5 moons of age, his name was Silverkit. He had a best friend named Ashrush, who would secretly train him. One night, Silverkit snuck away from the clan for food but was attacked by a wolf who scarred his right eye. Ashrush appeared and saved him but she injured herself and died short days after. To remember Ashrush's wishes, Silverkit changed his name to Wolfscar to remember that night and his best friend, and formed Moonclan, something Ashrush only dreamed of doing.
Okay.. I like that he got scarred. But you never said ANYTHING about that in the appearance! half point off. But what about Apprentice-hood? Wheres that? And WHY MOONclan?! 2/10
Other: because Silverkit fled at a young age, he never properly learned full training. He has a scar from the wolf on his right eye.
Okie. 10/10
I DID SORT OFF TAKE 10 POINTS OFF BECAUSE OF NO MATE<CRUSH<OR KITS, SINCE I CANT RATE THAT. SORRY.
Overall, 62/100 (minus the Mate crush and kits) All rants above^^
