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REVIEW: UNRESOLVED LOVE #2

Admin writing review: CHBlackk

Author: smkj1713

Title: Unresolved Love

Genre: Poetry

Cover: // 

I decided I won't review the cover you're currently using. I saw you're soon gonna get a new one, so it seems pointless to ruin the review right off the bat. 

The Description: 8/10

I could barely decide on this rating. First, I like it that it's short. It can be dreadful to have to read through a mile long description. Of course, writing descriptions for poetry are sometimes a little hard to write. I gotta say, the first lines are kind of witty, when you mention lines sticking to our mouth. It's definitely a start that pulls a reader in. What bothered me was just a thing of my own preference. I'm not a fan of paragraphs that stick together, but you can listen to this or not. 

The Characters: 10/10

As characters, I will just give you a review of the narrator of your poems. Obviously, that was you or at least it was written that way. The pain that was described through your eyes was believable, the wishes, the longing for something. I could relate to all of it and even sympathise with it. I could reflect the described feelings as if I were stripped naked. Through your eyes, this poetry woke something in me, so really, I have nothing else to say about this!

Grammar & Punctuation:  8/10

Pleaaaaaaaase, don't use 'u' as 'you'. It really triggers me and interrupts the joyful and emotional feelings I've been feeling while reading your poems & description. It was bothersome because in that way I'm a grammar nazi, so... Please, fix that and... Don't do it again. Also, I know that punctuation isn't that important in poetry, but I think in Hostage To Myself you should use a comma every now and then. If that was the point of the poem, then I deeply apologise. About the rest of the grammar and vocabulary; you had a wonderful wording and besides the 'u' thingy, I was in seven heaven because of the perfect grammar. You used all the 'have's' and apostrophes where they need to be used, ah.. I died and went to heaven!

Advice & General Overall Stuff:

The subtitles surprised me, though. They weren't just called 'Sadness' or 'Happiness'. I like it that you thought about it, it certainly added more magic to the poem itself. My only advice would be, every now and then throw your eyes on the rhythm of your poems. Sometimes it gets funky, or I just don't know how to read it. But generally, I think that was a really sweet collection of poetry that deserves more recognition and more poems added with time. So, do not stop writing and rhyming :D