Wonderland Reviews And Covers [OPEN]

REVIEW: EVELYN RAY AND THE MOON SPIRIT

Admin writing review: @FallenAngel128

Author: @shadowgirl664

Title: Evelyn Ray And The Moon Spirit

Genre: Fantasy

Cover: Rating 10/10.

What an amazing cover! So beautiful and eye-catching. I absolutely loved it since the first glance. It looks very professional. Whoever made it, hats off to that person! It also goes well with the title of your book. Especially 'the moon spirit' part, it looks magical, like it wants to take us into a world filled with all kinds of beauty and spirits of amazing realms.

Description: Rating 9/10.

I like the description. It's written from your characters POV. Which not only tells us what the story is about but also gives us a sense of your character, whom I gotta say, I like already! Just by the description. It is neatly written, and actually quite interesting. The first line is a hook, that will get people to want to take a peek at what you got in store for them. Well done with everything so far!

Grammar and punctuation: Rating 9/10.

As I have been growing as an author and editor, I rarely come to give 10/10 for grammar and punctuation. That's simply because no one is flawless when it comes to this aspect. Even when we're not being picky, we can still spot a flaw or two in the text. The laws of linguistic is complicated, what can I say, I didn't make the rules! I'm babbling, but, all I gotta say is, that you nearly got a perfect score on your grammar and punctuation. It looks incredibly neat and right. Every comma, period, quotation mark and whatever else was needed, were where they were supposed to be. That makes me extremely happy as a reader because I enjoyed reading your text a lot more. The only tiny, not even worthy of mentioning the flaw, that I'm still going to mention here to keep you humble is--- *Numbers lower than 10, should be written in letters. As said, I have no idea why that is, but it's one of the rules that everyone just goes with, but no one really gets bothered by if it's one way or the other.

Characters: Rating 9/10.

Everlyn. In the prologue, she's a little girl with her parents, and she's so darn adorable! You portray her as a kid with wonder and amazement towards the world her parents are showing her. Her parents seemed very lovely and caring, it warmed my heart. And shortly after, you introduced us to a magical world where the Pegasus, Sparkle, arrived flying. And then everything turned dark. Evelyn lost her parents to a dark force, and my heart sank. The prologue was very gripping and sad. I must praise you for the execution of the story, although very heartbreaking, you managed to hook me on it to the point where I just couldn't get to the next page fast enough. The first chapter is where Evelyn is a teen. And her life has not been all rainbows and sunshine, which once again made me feel bad for her. I do like the fact that you put your character into a tragical situation. It makes a good story even if it's hard to read such things. It seems to me that you knew exactly how you wanted Evelyn to be, and you did an amazing job at writing her. BRAVO.

Things I loved:

I loved everything about this book, of what I read so far. You have the incredible talent of description and a very creative mind. You took us out from this modern age society and threw us into a fantasy world alongside Evelyn. Your story has action, sorrow, heartwarming scenes--- all great things combined! Very well done, I really enjoyed reading and reviewing this story.