Found out today my cousin is pregnant and the baby is due in November. Now I've got a slight case of baby fever 😔
There are more photos. Get rid of them.
Anywho, we start off the chapter with Soomi and Miori. I think a lot of people already noticed and I also confirmed this myself in a couple of comments, but I just thought I'd clarify here. Yes, Miori is Japanese.
Just like with those stupid times, there's another thing in this chapter that caused me a lot of pain while writing this story; the names Jimin uses. Friends are allowed to call him Jimin but everyone else is supposed to call him either Park Jimin or Mr. Park. I honestly have no idea why I made this a thing because it caused me so much unnecessary work. With Clarisse, it wasn't much of an issue but you have no idea how many times I just wanted to have the other offerers call him Jimin.
The conversation stops once they're called down for dinner by none other than CeLeStE. Back when she used to be an enemy, remember those times? To be honest, I've always liked Celeste's character. She's badass but we won't see that until later. Also I noticed two comments mentioning The Selection Series. I have, in fact, read the series (and also highly recommend it to those who haven't, it's by Kiera Cass ♥︎🥰) and Celeste's name was inspired by the Celeste in that book.
Right after this we come to a part that I've been meaning to talk about...the god-awful east and west wing bullshit. But before I get into it, yes I was inspired by Beauty and the Beast.
This shit went absolutely nowhere and I hate myself for it.
When I first started writing I know I wanted to do something with this but totally forgot about it. And this is mainly because of how disorganized I was when it came to planning. I started this book just writing whatever came to mind. There were certain parts or scenes I imagined that were either included because they stuck with me or were forgotten (but I managed to fit most, if not all, into the sequel). My plans for the wings were completely forgotten, unfortunately.
It wasn't until a few chapters after chapter 5 I actually realized how hard it was to just write on the spot so I decided to create a notes entry on the app to start storing important elements of the story/elements I wanted to include (THE FIRST THING YA GIRL DID WAS ADD THOSE FUCKING TIMES). This varies from some of the important "rules" for the vampires, to characters, to scenes I want to include in future chapters, or even complete sets of dialogue. It's something I do for all my stories now and it totally saved my life.
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(^that's an example of some of the stuff I include and how I organized it)
So yeah, in conclusion I hate the fucking wing stuff. Honestly, just ignore it because it's totally irrelevant.
The rest of the chapter is pretty dry in terms of stuff I can critique. The only other noteworthy part is when (Y/n) wakes up and Jimin is sitting, watching her. Y'ALL FREAKED OUT AT THE SLEEPING BEAUTY PART. Although it's not like I can blame you because if I woke up and the Park Jimin said that to me I think I would shit and fart and lay on the table and offer myself up as a meal 🙃
Now that he's here though stuff finally starts to pick up a bit, SO YAY.
