Review done by HAPPINESS_IS_YOU_
[Please remember that the whole review is from the reviewer's, my, point of view. Different people have different likes so the opinions may vary. Please remember this as you proceed to read the review.]
COVER (9.3/10)
So wow. The cover is actually really beautiful.
I can see the sky and water, or maybe one portal and another.
There are a lot of colors.
But I think the font of the title of the story and the author's name look a bit pale in comparison to the actual cover pic and the background colour, yellow, of the text is looking odd.
I would advise you to change the font a bit to make it look more appealing and maybe remove the background colour of the font.
TITLE (9.7/10)
The title is really beautiful and unique.
I specially love when an author use either uncommon words or mix common words together to form an uncommon title so there goes some bonus points for you.
I would advise you to write 'Romance of the Portal' instead of 'Romance Of The Portal'.
DESCRIPTION/BLURB (7.3/10)
The description is okay. It's good but I can be better.
I think you gave too much information and too few words. There were no gaps in between lines.
I would advise you to leave a line blank when you complete a paragraph and don't make description a one-paragraph thing. Three paragraphs (long) are good but two works too. Never use only one paragraph to write a description.
PLOT (9.8/10)
The plot was original and refreshing.
There were some funny moments, a lot of information, and not overly descriptive paragraphs.
Veer's character and his behavior was my favorite thing in the story.
There was a lot of unusual names and I couldn't even pronounce most of them. A friend of mine told me that it's a Hindu Mythology story so there might be some words and believe me when I say I am not a fan of mythologies. But this story was really amazing and there's no doubt about it.
FLOW OF THE STORY (7/10)
Since there was no word count, it was difficult to see the flow of words but some chapters were of medium length and some really short.
Also in some chapters, a lot of information was given and in some very few.
I would advise you to maintain a word limit and try to write around it. A few words more or less won't hurt but at least try to maintain it. Another advise would be to think of the plot before you even write it and divide it into parts, then divide it further to add each part of plot in a chapter. Using this method, almost equal information will be used in each chapter.
CHARACTERS DEVELOPMENT (6/10)
I really loved Veer's character. He was actually a fierce warrior with a lot of powers and knowledge. He was smart and funny. And everything you can think of foe the term 'Knight in Shining Armor'.
But I think you missed Suhaani's character. From what I have read till now, I would say all I see is a lovestruck puppy without any brain.
I am sorry if I sound rude but it's the truth. As a reader myself, I really enjoyed reading the story. Even with all its faults, everything is perfect and just beautiful.
WRITING STYLE (8.3/10)
The writing style is good.
There are a few spelling mistakes and grammar and punctuation mistakes too.
I would advise you to read the chapters twice more each so that you can feel the mistakes too or there are many editing shops out in Wattpad from where you cam take a bit help.
GENRE RELEVANCE & TAGS USED (10/10)
The more tags there are, the more it would help the readers to find your story.
More tags means more ways to get more readers so there goes some bonus points to you.
READER'S ENJOYMENT (10/10)
It's clear the readers are loving the plot. There are so many questions asked and so many good things said that who am I to advise you something to make the readers like it more.
You even reply to their comments which is a very good thing.
REVIEWERS PERSONAL LIKING (8.9/10)
I personally don't like mythologies as they make my mind spin and give me a headache but this one is truly amazing.
If you follow the advise above then this book would be like one of those published books.
Keep it up!
And here comes a magical overall from the apsaras!
OVERALL (86.6/100)
If you love Hindu Mythology with a lot of magical creatures in it and maybe some portals and a evil army then this book is for you!
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