CLN's Seasonal Reviews (CLOSED)

Cheat - by - scftblxck__

Review done by: badestbitchhh_

Cover: The picture used is eye-catching but it looks really spacey, besides...I can't see its relevance. I would suggest adding more elements and pictures that are related to angst so that the readers get an idea of what they are going to read.

Title: It is simple yet relevant and meaningful, though, I still think some more words could be added like "He cheated" or "Cheated love" to define the plot deliberately.

Description: It was really short and described the whole plot. I would suggest adding a specific scene or dialogue to intrigue the readers and make them have the interest to read it.

Plot: The plot used a basic trope but I will call it cliche since the actions were something that has been used everywhere, where you could use some twists and turns rather than having a simple story with angst that was not really felt.

Storyline: The planning was really basic since everything was obvious and clear. Like aforementioned, try having twists and turns along with cliffhangers to hook the readers till the end.

Dialogue delivery: The dialogues were fine but the tags were missing at times, so I'll suggest you add them in order to avoid confusion.

Indulgent: I felt like the description was not enough and clear since I couldn't understand when an angst scene came up, I had a straight face all along. I would advise you to describe every scene properly and explain everything meticulously for better understanding.

Character development: The characters had some major and obvious developments, I would have suggested adding twists here and making it more interesting.

Pace: The flow wasn't slow but too fast instead, everything happened in a bolt of thunder. It would be better if you add more description of their life and let the readers know them properly.

Grammar and Vocab:

There are many tense errors like "has" instead of "had"

Punctuation was proper but was missing at times like "jungkook" instead of "Jungkook"

Don't use lines like "B-" This will count as a grammatical mistake because the word is not complete, so I would like to ask you to write the whole thing and then state that he/she was cut off or couldn't complete the sentence.

I would suggest you not use words in caps like "WHAT", you can mention that he/she vocalized the particular thing loudly instead.

Sense: It did make sense till now but was really simple and obvious.

Strengths: I didn't really find any.

Weakness: The description, storyline, and grammar.

Suggestion: I would suggest you read books with advanced grammar and unique plots, then try writing passages and mixing them together. This will help you to get a broader knowledge of both aspects.